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Dis dudes gay, he tucks his balls in his shit its forcin-a-hernia….*
Hallucinating a win? Dis kid must have (sceritz)aphrenia// (schizophrenia)**
[Sorry, but the nameplay is really forced here, so it takes away from the punch a lot...5/10...Also I don't know the people you know that have had a hernia, maybe it can be called a hernia when your balls go into your body too. BUT I know for a fact, you can have a hernia and have your testicles. LMAO]
I aint hearin ya, cuz I cashd-valiums, don’t crash-my-mood….
if dis dude was in my mirror he still couldn’t match-my-moves//
[Lol okay, not the freshest punch ever but clever...6.5/10]
u hearn me dude, u aint catchn a clue, dey wouldn’t even pay 9 cents, if u were givin em two….***
If dese are low blows who u gonna tell it to, I got in ya chicks pants by sayin id marry her too//****
[Again, nothing serious here. Both personals were weak and the fact that you ryhmed basically the same word shows that there was a lack of creativity here...6/10]
wat ya gona do, cuz I shook-ya-right, cant catch a fish wit da hooks-ya-write….
Dam am I dat low wen K chose-da-fight, cuz im battlen a fuckin lil jj look-alike//*****
[Decent punch I guess, lol he kinda does look like him. Setup was decent too, i liked it...7.5/10]
Dat booked it tight, he tryna get fame, boy dats a shame, when ur style is lame….
After dis he wont be da same, cuz I had him hooked up 2 an IV after reading his name//******
[Decent personal here...I still feel you try a LITTLE to hard to bring up personals that aren't very hard hitting, but you haven't really even tried a little harder to change that, so imma stop saying that soon, lmao...6.5/10]
Xposen da flame, to another weak-fighter, just to make his teeth-whiter….
Dis dude says he never drops flow but he cant hold up a wee-cypher// *******
[Again, wheres the link to this cypher, how do I know it's true? If your going to diss the specifics have proof in your verse somewhere, because right now its just hearsay...5.5/10]
Made his chest lighter, when I blasted his shirt off,so go cry-prick…
Cuz even tho ur “T”mobile you couldn’t be my “side-kick”//********
[Alright...Decent line I guess, though I don't know why he'd like to be your sidekick anyways, so i guess it's a win, win...5.5/10]
Man u cant see thru this, like I see thru ya teeth….
21???? And still ya sleepin on spidaman bed sheets//*********
[Flow was off and choppy which hurt your closer, remember, just because you write the bar last, doesn't mean it has to be your last bar, switch a hard hitting middle bar with your closer if your closer sucks in comparasin. Still, funny personal I guess. But the dudes engaged, he doesn't have to worry about kiddy sheets getting into the way of his macking anymore. POWER TO THE WEB HEAD!!! rofl...7/10]
ToTTALL::: Your verse was muffeled down by choppy flow here and there and personals that have no buissness being in a verse. REALLY, only use personals that are hard hitting man. I admire the fact that you focus very hard on making verses original to every battler you face but still, it doesn't all have to be forced personals. BUT, like always you had promising lines as well...49.5/80
Burnin’ through this verse, to be rude and hurt, cuz you da worse/
you’re straight L’in/Ellen, like you was her from another universe!/
[Not feeling this one man, L'in is a phrase I have never heard in correspondence to takin an l, you could of said posssibly, he has trouble taking the L in/Ellen like [insert dope metta i would think of if i wasn't lazy here]...5/10]
stupid nerd , you ain’t heard? I’m a puzzle to well thinkers/ *
You’ll get yourself killed tryin’ to solve me like Hell Raiser!/*
[Flow was meh and the rhyme scheme seemed off here to me, i don't know about you...Again, not a hard punch, better then the opener though...6/10]
“M” can’t flip it to a dub (“W”) you ain’t next to be winnin’,‘less I be trippin’ /
Wit extra weak vision, he ecstasy driven for L’s/El’s like Mexican Women/*
[Sorry bro the L/El play is played as shit. That L'in line you said was the only new L play ive seen in awhile, just assume it's already been used when you think of a play with L in it. lol...5.5/10]
You next to get tooken, plus ya textin’ is cheap/
Well, least you got a phone with an excellent fee!/ (*shrug*)
[lol flow was sick here and I liked the bard. Not even that hard hitting but the flow made it dope to me...7/10]
But if ya started on the ‘right’ foot messin’ wit me/
you wouldn’t be stressin’ cuz ya ‘left’ in defeat/da feet/
[Flow was off here at the end, obviously I won't accuse you of biting here, but even I have used a da feet, defeat line back in the day, def one of the most played wordplays in existence. 5.5/10]
yo, listen to me, he so broke, he can’t get a free show so/*
I guess it’s safe to say we’ll never see promo/”Pro-Moe”
[Decent bar here...Not really feeling the flow again, it seems like in the second line of your bar you keep cutting it short...6.5/10]
Plus I fought enough of these homos wit zero flow/
please go home I don’t’ wanna see no mo’ / “No Moe”
[Lol, again, decent nameplay, could of def made it harder hitting...6.5/10]
he’s no pro, loosin' like he tryna get casino dough/
he so cold, look, his score is below “O”/* (haha)
[Lol, decent closer, good to finish off with a personal, good flow. 7/10]
TOtttaLLL::: Scer you came good in this battle, though I've seen better. I liked how u started coming more personal at your opponents. I think that your on the edge of becoming a fucking killer text head, and to make it to that next level, your going to need to lengthen your bars a bit more to be able to fit in more words. Once that happens, then you will start killin' cats. It's easy to have amazing flowing short verses that are comical, but that will always loose to the stretched style that is able to fit so much more lyricism into a bar...49/80
VoTe::: FUCK, I hate giving the W to someone when they only win by as close as a margin as .5...BUT it has to be done. MOE came decent, but his flow and weak personals left him open to get beaten. Lucky for MOE though, he had a couple dope bars that helped him pull through the wreckage though, as he also had the best bar of the battle too. Scer you had a chance to capatalize on his mistakes, and after reading his verse, I was pretty sure you were going to. But unfortuently you didn't rise to the occasion, and lost by a fucking tiny little hair...CLOSE ass battle, Killah called it.
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Killed: Menace(KO), Sceritz(KO), Modern Defiance(KO)
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Moe you aint right for that
