Rocawear, Nike, Gucci


Post new topic Reply to topic  [ 4 posts ] 
Post subject: Some Have Come....Some Have Gone
PostPosted: Fri Nov 20, 2009 3:24 pm 
Elevated
User avatar
Offline

Posts: 8855
Wins: 45
Losses: 14
Cash: 9984
Some have come, some have gone
some are numb, some are strong
some have lost their fame, some have tossed their chain
some have blossomed, some never had a summer reign
I can list off a dozen names, lightening in a bottle, their thunder came
some were undertrained, they couldn't run the game
got off track and couldn't jump a train
some come of age, dreading the day, this dream has to end
some went off to college to never rap again
some lost their love and passion, others rediscovered rappin
some kept to battling because they loved the bloody action
some are left rehashing freestyles wrote in years past
despite the clear fact, they'll never get their career back
some hear that, thinking he is just cynical, his written shit is pitiful
he is too critical, when they had a reciprocal thought a minute ago
some reached the pinnacle, others only started to climb the ladder
some had the illest rhyming patterns, but their mind was scattered
some lines were mastered, others lost the script
some started beef, just to squash the shit
some got to eat, others are starved at the feast
some went hard on the beats, but their bars weren't deep

_________________
Image

The better writer you become, the more you realize how horrible you actually are.


Top
 Profile  
 

 

Post subject: Re: Some Have Came....Some Have Gone
PostPosted: Tue Nov 24, 2009 8:25 am 
Supreme Lyricist
User avatar
Offline

Posts: 3674
Wins: 4
Losses: 9
Cash: 8581
Some Have Come

Came isnt proper english lol

_________________
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!


Mutual's MixPod


Top
 Profile  
 

Post subject: Re: Some Have Came....Some Have Gone
PostPosted: Tue Nov 24, 2009 11:06 am 
Elevated
User avatar
Offline

Posts: 8855
Wins: 45
Losses: 14
Cash: 9984
- Mutual - wrote:
Some Have Come

Came isnt proper english lol


Fixed it. Though I stole the concept the line from somewhere, I think.

_________________
Image

The better writer you become, the more you realize how horrible you actually are.


Top
 Profile  
 

Post subject: Re: Some Have Come....Some Have Gone
PostPosted: Fri Nov 27, 2009 5:45 am 
Supreme Lyricist
User avatar
Offline

Posts: 3674
Wins: 4
Losses: 9
Cash: 8581
now this is a dope piece the flow was maintained it had nice multies but a minute ago line didnt rhyme to me this was deep shit very nice

_________________
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!


Mutual's MixPod


Top
 Profile  
 

Display posts from previous:  Sort by  
Post new topic Reply to topic  [ 4 posts ] 


All times are UTC + 10 hours


Who is online

Registered users: Google [Bot], MSN [Bot], Riddler, Yahoo [Bot]


You cannot post new topics in this forum
You cannot reply to topics in this forum
You cannot edit your posts in this forum
You cannot delete your posts in this forum
You cannot post attachments in this forum

Search for:
Jump to:  
Powered by phpBB | PhpBB-Seo © 2000, 2002, 2005, 2007 phpBB Group

phpBB SEO