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Post subject: Truth Be Told
PostPosted: Fri Nov 20, 2009 11:09 am 
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Ayo since ive been alive there's no need to lie..
I've been keepin speakers by my side N they aint leavin mine..
Same like the mic hears some slight reasons why..
when i do this not to leave you wit a weak or decent vibe..
I'll dig deep reach inside and leave some lines..
that'll open the most certain unbelievers eyes..
havin most be surprised when there's beef besides..
to see this guy standin half ya size highly amplified..
droppin shit that'll make clicks stick to classified..
and wont stop till grasp is mine, quik wit the chance to climb..
Leavin most to roast next to steppin stones once i threatin zones
makin contenders surrender without the cencors blown..
fearless never swingin wit a clear fist i defend my own..
out for all to hear this severe shit dont be left to roam..
And I'll never forget all the practice and devotion..
do to that im estatic knowin that my statis is ferocious..
Now you know this and you see how i be droppin victims..
and there squad so they'll be rottin wit em..
yea you can hear it from the top when you listen..
you forgot who you dissin? that a question that im askin..
fuck the weapons and the mask bitch in seconds you get damaged..
Soul cant manage wit this menace gunnin at it..
yea i like to diss..Its a fuckin Habit!..
to be ruthless N devine punches have ya eyes brused Wen arrived..
Ya useless a pure nusence in ya prime i'll ruin ya design..
And keep in mind that the only time your units move... is Wen i Move Em to the Side!!

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Post subject: Re: Truth Be Told
PostPosted: Sat Nov 21, 2009 8:10 am 
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Listen!




Ayo since ive been alive there's no need to lie..
I've been keepin speakers by my side N they aint leavin mine..
Same like the mic hears some slight reasons why..
when i do this not to leave you wit a weak or decent vibe..
I'll dig deep reach inside and leave some lines..
that'll open the most certain unbelievers eyes..
havin most be surprised when there's beef besides..

I really liked this, good scheme

to see this guy standin half ya size highly amplified..
droppin shit that'll make clicks stick to classified..
and wont stop till grasp is mine, quik wit the chance to climb..
Leavin most to roast next to steppin stones once i threatin zones
makin contenders surrender without the cencors blown..

The last 2 lines were slick. Fix the damn spelling error though.

fearless never swingin wit a clear fist i defend my own..
out for all to hear this severe shit dont be left to roam..

Once again, working on them inners.


And I'll never forget all the practice and devotion..
do to that im estatic knowin that my statis is ferocious..

More spelling errors. Good presence of mind to end with a sharp rhyme.

Now you know this and you see how i be droppin victims..
and there squad so they'll be rottin wit em..

Nice.

yea you can hear it from the top when you listen..
you forgot who you dissin? that a question that im askin..
fuck the weapons and the mask bitch in seconds you get damaged..
Soul cant manage wit this menace gunnin at it..
yea i like to diss..Its a fuckin Habit!..

Oh. Ended weak. I was really feeling where you were going with that.


to be ruthless N devine punches have ya eyes brused Wen arrived..
Ya useless a pure nusence in ya prime i'll ruin ya design..
And keep in mind that the only time your units move... is Wen i Move Em to the Side!!

Pretty good punch to end it. More spelling errors!




Sorry. When you're using pretty decent vocabulary, its a tragedy to not spell the words right. As for this drop, I thought it was solid, maybe lacked a bit of the punch that I expected, but was well worth the read.

Leave more feed on peoples drops, you will get a lot more feedback.

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Post subject: Re: Truth Be Told
PostPosted: Tue Nov 24, 2009 7:45 am 
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that'll open the most certain unbelievers eyes..
havin most be surprised when there's beef besides..
to see this guy standin half ya size highly amplified..
droppin shit that'll make clicks stick to classified..
^^^^ I really felt that for some reason!

the vibe to this was dope, it felt like you was going in
keeping it real tho' I felt kinda lost toward the end
then again maybe I missed somethin'
either way this was solid man I'd say a 7 outta 10!
keep writing my dude nice work!

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Post subject: Re: Truth Be Told
PostPosted: Tue Nov 24, 2009 11:23 am 
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vocab/lyrics were very simple but effective i liked the flow metas and all tht shit was cool man i fuked wit it
had a couple of nice lines in there keep it up man good shit.

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Post subject: Re: Truth Be Told
PostPosted: Wed Nov 25, 2009 7:30 am 
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yeah its been a while menace but that shit was on point for the most part sick inner meanings, i liked the opener. pretty basic, but fuck it was dope homie

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Post subject: Re: Truth Be Told
PostPosted: Fri Nov 27, 2009 2:26 am 
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Good Looks On the Feed Mod..


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