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Post by barsforyears »

is there a problem if i talk fast,scouting these mices gusseing i should hawk that,pistol whip the ignorant brother who wanna talk back,shuryken him till the spinning kicks give him a hyadoken of a heart attack
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Is this for real... I'm lost on what you are attempting to do? If this is a cypher, we have a section for that, if this is a written you want feed on, go to the written section, feed some other pieces, and post yours. Try making it longer so we can get a better feel for what you're throwing down. Structure it like some of the other pieces in the written section as well so we can better find the flow.
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Post by Kulture »

Fix your structure and throw in a few multies maybe, but wrong section bud.
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