"I Hate Work"

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"I Hate Work"

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[center]Practice Makes Perfect Or Better...[/center][center]To belabor to the neighbors enabling me to make it
Through anal assimilated groups daily is an insatiable task
For the kangaroos, rapacious and fat
From the gorillas who will kill us to voracious giraffes
On the daily I'm paraded with a maze of morass
In this chaparral in shackles getting chained to the ass
Of an ambassador or manager who came to harass me
And vociferate till anything they saying is raspy
To reciprocate the way we keep acting
And humiliate brashly
They depart, then we imitate laughing
While the primitive people with an indigenous standing
Act ridiculous to get all my attention and ask me
To assist em' and go listen then get pissed when I can't keep
Giving them candy canes for this Christmas there having
An attempt to get a lip to bend or anything tackled
Is impossible…when a ventriloquist has you
In a shift with a demented and submissive representative
A hypnotized hire with expensive medicine in him
Sending bits of information places to administer
Anything uncanny in the kitchen or the kitchenette
Work is just a jungle where the weather is intemperate
A cold abode that will mold more idiots
Clone more kids and condone more ignorance
To make more pawns and create more discipline
I HATE WORK...[/center]

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Woah. Your vocab is out of control. And normally I would say that is a good thing, but it seems over the top. I've met professors from Ivy League colleges who don't speak like that and either you're heavily involved in some strange book reading or you're using way too much Thesaurus Online.

Slow it down a little to make it more real. You clearly have talent, as displayed in this written piece, but I think if you made more simple and relatable to the public, you could hold our interest longer. Not trying to say you have to "dumb it down" but nobody can relate to or feel emotion from lines like this:
Through anal assimilated groups daily is an insatiable task
For the kangaroos, rapacious and fat
From the gorillas who will kill us to voracious giraffes
On the daily I'm paraded with a maze of morass
Take it or leave it. Some people might like your style a lot, my word isn't law.
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Post by PMP_Or_Better »

I can definitely agree with what your saying so I understand. I do read a lot and I also do use a thesaurus as well. You made a great point and I appreciate the feed. I just don't know, maybe being extremely complex isn't the thing up here on the Illest. Thanks for your honesty though.
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