Lyrical Gods

We use to take it to the streets with graffiti, now we take it online with graphic designing, photography, scanning, so show us what you got... Anything visual arts!

Moderator: Loon E Lou

Post Reply
User avatar
- Mutual -
Supreme Lyricist
Offline
Posts: 4442
Joined: Wed Apr 09, 2008 2:01 am
Wins: 5
Losses: 11
Location: Dont Live In One

Lyrical Gods

Post by - Mutual - »

Image

what about this then
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
Image
User avatar
Miilz
Rap Assassin
Offline
Posts: 638
Joined: Wed Sep 10, 2008 11:46 am
Wins: 3
Losses: 0

Post by Miilz »

Yeah This is What u Made Me i Like it, Where Did u Get That Text From Kurse? if u Dont Mind, i'd Like To Have it To The Whole Alphabet.


Guys, This is The Description i've Asked For So Dont Mind it Not Being colorful.
User avatar
- Mutual -
Supreme Lyricist
Offline
Posts: 4442
Joined: Wed Apr 09, 2008 2:01 am
Wins: 5
Losses: 11
Location: Dont Live In One

Post by - Mutual - »

like i said MSN i can send u shit
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
Image
User avatar
Miilz
Rap Assassin
Offline
Posts: 638
Joined: Wed Sep 10, 2008 11:46 am
Wins: 3
Losses: 0

Post by Miilz »

Ok We'll ..i'll Pm u it.
User avatar
8th
Rap Professional
Offline
Posts: 1976
Joined: Wed Aug 30, 2006 10:27 am
Wins: 0
Losses: 1

Post by 8th »

eh. not really better.

First off, that is a horrible font. Do not go and download hundreds of "cool, different" fonts. Stick with quality fonts. Heres a list of awesome free Serif fonts: (Times New Roman is a "Serif" font. Helvetica would be an exmaple of "Sans-Serif" You'll need to know the difference)

http://thinkdesignblog.com/20-beautiful ... -fonts.htm


Also, NEVER EVER stretch text. You obviously stretched the text horizontally. (atleast of the headline "Lyrical Gods") If you want a wider font, then use a wider font, or adjust the "Kerning" (which is the space between the letters) to make the font face your using wider. But NEVER stretch type.
User avatar
- Mutual -
Supreme Lyricist
Offline
Posts: 4442
Joined: Wed Apr 09, 2008 2:01 am
Wins: 5
Losses: 11
Location: Dont Live In One

Post by - Mutual - »

do u work on being a good teacher
so stubborn good way to get a message across
stay stern but well thankx fo the advice any how
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
Image
User avatar
8th
Rap Professional
Offline
Posts: 1976
Joined: Wed Aug 30, 2006 10:27 am
Wins: 0
Losses: 1

Post by 8th »

It was meant as constructive criticism. As I've said several times, everyone starts out where you are. I'm not trying to insult you or anything. I'm just trying to give you advice and tips along the way. I will never give straight negative feedback. The feedback might not be positive toward the piece I'm critiquing, but I will always try to be constructive in offerings solutions, or explanations as to why it doesn't work.
User avatar
Da JoKeR
Rookie
Offline
Posts: 13
Joined: Sun Dec 21, 2008 7:34 am
Wins: 0
Losses: 0

Post by Da JoKeR »

it looks like a cheap, chinese, chalk-based, billboard's 3rd rough draft.
User avatar
- Mutual -
Supreme Lyricist
Offline
Posts: 4442
Joined: Wed Apr 09, 2008 2:01 am
Wins: 5
Losses: 11
Location: Dont Live In One

Post by - Mutual - »

like this guy then
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
Image
Post Reply

Return to “Illest Visual Arts”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 2 guests