Overloved

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Overloved

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I need to find somebody who can't sleep at night
Without holding me tight
I want someone who sees me all the time in their dreams
And then wakes up thinking just of me

I want someone who can't wait to kiss me again
Even though it's been a minute since they last did
Want someone who loves love songs
And dedicates them to me
And two loving arms never out of reach

Want someone to talk to me with talk so sweet
Want someone who's there to share their world with me
I've been too lonely for too many nights
I need someone here in my life
I want someone holding me tight
Been under kissed, under touched
Now I just wanna be

Overloved
Over needed
Over wanted
Over missed when I'm away
Overloved
Over dreamed of
Over cared about
Over everything
I'd give anything to be overloved

I just wanna be
Overloved
By someone who's over in love with me
Overloved
Over kissed over touched
Oh I just wanna be overloved
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Re: Overloved

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people like you should be overlooked for biting...
that is all
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Re: Overloved

Post by IntrinsicCadence »

Yeah, I'm not feeling this one too much. It sounds like a sappy pop song Brittany Spears might sing.
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Re: Overloved

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people like you should be overlooked for biting...
that is all
IDK...Really???
Anyways This Is What poetry Is About People.....Just Cuz It Has Not Flow Or What Not It Was Heartfelt...This It Just Seems U been Neglected Some Affection i Dont Knock U..Get Deeper And More Creative Dude
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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Re: Overloved

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this was more of a poem type piece to me man. but it was pretty cool. like flip said i would try expanding a bit more and work with diff flows and get more creative. keep droppin though.
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