Trick Or Treat B****

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Trick Or Treat B****

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Random shit i made i made last month, i posting it now..
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Hmm the flow fell off in a few places. Your delivery has a mix of B-Real and Lil Wayne, slightly annoying but commercial enough for mainstream. Work on the flow is my suggestion. Ride the beat, don't let the shit get away from you.
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the beat is pretty sick... You sound like a mix of ICP and Lil Wayne haha.. Not dissin.. you did fall off some parts and some lines were to big and you tried to fit them.. mixing was pretty good.. keep dropping man.
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Had a couple nice lines, but like others said they were too forced. And flow seemed choppy, you have smooth ya words out or crunch a bar so they fit right. Your swag was on point, energy, and the mixing was str8 too. Just work on ya rhyme scheme.
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Re: Trick Or Treat B****

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it sound like lil boosie and lil wayne shit not really my style n shit but im sure a lot of otha kinda ppl would listen to it........flow was off jus work on that and you'll be str8 fam
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