Vermon Sermon

[blokB]

alright so im trying to break away from my simple (this sounds good so im done with it) style and get more indepth while still keeping an abstract feel. i think i may have hit it. but it still sounds too simple to me. Any ideas? thanx.

[K KiLLaH]

When a verse is layed I think you should think about adding more to the beat like something clashing and shit so it sounds like the beats rising...cuz so far as a rapper I would attack this beat with momentum..then SNAP sumwhere n enter SPAZMODE converting from punchlies n wicked multies to HAYMAKERS

[blokB]

thanx man. u wanna do it? id love to hear an emcee besides myself on my track since i hate my recorded voice for some reason. lemme know dude. ill send you the beat if you wanna write and record a verse or two for it. id be honored.

[K KiLLaH]

Im down check ya pms if theres any others I got a team of emcees with diverse styles and Im very diverse anyways I strike all sujects for the most part

[IntrinsicCadence]

Alright man, I can feel this. The beat is smooth, easy to ride with. I think the addition of some low/deep piano keys would be killer, especially in that spot where the first verse'd fit. But I liked this a lot, nice energy to it.

[blokB]

hell ya dude im glad your feelin it. i feel like ive been trying to come into my own for a while now and im hoping on on the right track, it feels right thats for sure. thanx for listening bruh.

[drunken jesus]

yeah like cadence said this could really use some piano some shit around the bassline + some upper chords in sections, basslines ill in this, synths have good patterns but i don't like the sounds they're too thin i'd use a different synth possibly an octave down maybe, i'd also consider adding some strings to this or possibly an organ cuz just with the low bassline & high synths theres nothing in the middle besides the drums & it sounds kinda empty, its pretty well done it just needs more added to it to finish it up

[blokB]

thanks for takin the time to listen jesus. much love.