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My name..... Freestyle

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Da name is adept//
So I got precision//
U cant block me neither intercept//
My path is already showin...I got a vision//

Let da truth be told..im not that good//
Most of da time wen I spit its misunderstood//

Tell me im fake?/You luv to hate?/Im'a fisher and u just shark bait.

wtf am i doing
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Post by Viral »

alot better den wat i seen before it seems like a AbAb rhyme scheme...dat works...jst try n make em alot more similiar n such
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

wat viral said.. till it got past the poetic part than it was regular.. 5 bucks 5 bucks! lol
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EkomS wrote:wat viral said.. till it got past the poetic part than it was regular.. 5 bucks 5 bucks! lol

now dats jst wrong!...lol :twisted:
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Post by drunken jesus »

pretty much whats been said

and your wording is all fucked up, no real rhythm at all

once you get more comfortable with writing and practice more you'll probably get better with it though
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Post by precise »

did i here precision? lol yea just keep practicin man, the ABAB rhymescheme viral was talkin about is often used in poetry, anyways yea, im not gonna hate on it, peace.
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Post by drunken jesus »

poetry? most good mcs use more complicated rhyme schemes lmao

anybody with an IQ above 20 can write in simplistic aabbcc rhyme schemes
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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