yea i wrote this shit tonight.
spat it few mins ago nothing fancy.
should i finish it?
work in progresso
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Re: work in progresso
just a little more emotion behind some of those bars but this is good man. you are progressing, see what happens when you practice instead of booty ballet lol
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Re: work in progresso
Nice lyrics, flow was on point with the beat as well as the subject matter, get you a chorus and this joint has some potential.
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Re: work in progresso
step ya bars up work on your delivery try to be consistent in context and to answer your q, no.
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Re: work in progresso
i wouldnt expect a hater to want me to finish anythingleeroi green wrote:step ya bars up work on your delivery try to be consistent in context and to answer your q, no.
thanks for that 1 line sentence feedback. although none of my bars needa be stepped up. my lyrics are fine as is. i need to work on my delivery and i recorded this in 5 mins basically to send it to CBK to peep but ended up posting it as a rough draft instead.
this song is gona be stellar when i get done
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Re: work in progresso
niice anti the beat is epic, an like i said id like to write the chorus if ur down.......
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Re: work in progresso
well...honestly i dont have an idea for a hook yet. send me something my way and ill see how well it fits
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Re: work in progresso
You've progressed from the first track I heard from you, you still need a lot of improvement, but we all do at some point. You're lacking emotion, and your delivery still doesn't fit the beat. I mean it's better than your old ones, but it still doesn't sound right yet.
Keep on practicing bro, with your lyrical abilities you're going to be a beast once you master this out.
The beat is hard as hell, I'd def save that, and re-finish it in the future.
Keep on practicing bro, with your lyrical abilities you're going to be a beast once you master this out.
The beat is hard as hell, I'd def save that, and re-finish it in the future.
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Re: work in progresso
word thanks Majin, who are you anyway? you seem familiar, i use to post at war lab also.
but yea like i stated, i didn't really "rap" this i just didn't it as a test run for the lyrics. ill try to step up my delivery for this one. when its finished ill be reposting this.
i may have a spot open also, if anyone wants to get down on this track holla
but yea like i stated, i didn't really "rap" this i just didn't it as a test run for the lyrics. ill try to step up my delivery for this one. when its finished ill be reposting this.
i may have a spot open also, if anyone wants to get down on this track holla
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