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Some Shit i Wrote

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Im gettin high enough my body will drop-spots//
to stop-cops from livin long enough to make mah crops-flop//
my lines r not-hot dere spiri-tual, makin dis a spear-ritual//
explain dis division-wit-precision, leave ur eye sight to invision-ur-remission//
guys mad like "my-camels-dead", dodgin n duckin while leapin-heads//


call me a fleet wit-feds, homie we beef wit-heads//(torn off)
leavin u in deep from treds,spillin da hot lava wit-lead//




Another Start on some other shit..haha


Im known as Deadly, Psychotic, deterioratin ur mind//
infiltrate into ur spine, cloggin brain cells wit my kind//
i inject it straight wit da lines, ur trippin off da vibes//
detectin light where it bines, while jacked by a tribe//

jst peep it n lemme get some feed back..haha..peeace
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Post by lunathecursedangel »

my lines r not-hot dere spiri-tual, makin dis a spear-ritual//

You are trying a lot of new style and shit, so this is a work in progress. But moving forward well. Overall this was just some throw together lines. No real piece. so i wont rate it, just say your on the right track
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