my hazard verse re-vised
Posted: Tue Jul 07, 2009 2:46 am
im revising my battle verses to see if they are improved and to see if it woulda been a better verse feed plz
1st verse against hazard
Ill K.O. you ina cat sweep, you'll-see-mirrorn-lists, o shit now your-seen-fearn-this...*
only if ya put "sour cream" on your spits, are you a supreme-lyricist//**
This jobs easy i don't need-a-vacation, ya always wantin a "myspace" to feed-off-relations...***
I know "hazard's signs", so no need to "trip hazard" "mind ya head hazard" before a "sudden drop" leaves ya in "deep-excavations"//****
I couldn't care less of da win while ya on da floor-pacen, why is it you always duck who your-facen...*****
we all know how "Uconn"(you con) so we know where your-placen, cuz ill leave ya "upset" like my name was "George-Mason"//******
I would hate for someone to reflect-ya-stunts, you only go under da belt so i'll deflect-ya-punts...
ya in a pussy "state" of mind, so ill take a knife and infect-ya-cunts, den tear it to ya ass to "connect-da-cuts"//(connecticut)
ima take it and revise it tell me if you think it was overall stronger...
youll-see-mirrorin lists, from the k.o, i kno your-fearin-this...
only wit sour cream on your spits, are you a supreme-lyricist//
so mind ya head hazard, do ya need-a-vacation...
cuz a sudden drop could leave ya in deep-excavations//
usin myspace to feed-off-relations, cuz dats how "Uconn" but we know where your-placen...
im like a mirror you cant duck who your-facen, now ur upset like my name was george mason//
now ur on da floor-pacen, ur ina pussy state cuz i won't reflect-ya-stunts...
didn't you know thats y it was placed for "connect-in-cunts"(connecticuts)//
ok after the 2nd verse do you think it is a better improvement... plz leave feed and do you think the structure is overall better and the flow let me know...
1st verse against hazard
Ill K.O. you ina cat sweep, you'll-see-mirrorn-lists, o shit now your-seen-fearn-this...*
only if ya put "sour cream" on your spits, are you a supreme-lyricist//**
This jobs easy i don't need-a-vacation, ya always wantin a "myspace" to feed-off-relations...***
I know "hazard's signs", so no need to "trip hazard" "mind ya head hazard" before a "sudden drop" leaves ya in "deep-excavations"//****
I couldn't care less of da win while ya on da floor-pacen, why is it you always duck who your-facen...*****
we all know how "Uconn"(you con) so we know where your-placen, cuz ill leave ya "upset" like my name was "George-Mason"//******
I would hate for someone to reflect-ya-stunts, you only go under da belt so i'll deflect-ya-punts...
ya in a pussy "state" of mind, so ill take a knife and infect-ya-cunts, den tear it to ya ass to "connect-da-cuts"//(connecticut)
ima take it and revise it tell me if you think it was overall stronger...
youll-see-mirrorin lists, from the k.o, i kno your-fearin-this...
only wit sour cream on your spits, are you a supreme-lyricist//
so mind ya head hazard, do ya need-a-vacation...
cuz a sudden drop could leave ya in deep-excavations//
usin myspace to feed-off-relations, cuz dats how "Uconn" but we know where your-placen...
im like a mirror you cant duck who your-facen, now ur upset like my name was george mason//
now ur on da floor-pacen, ur ina pussy state cuz i won't reflect-ya-stunts...
didn't you know thats y it was placed for "connect-in-cunts"(connecticuts)//
ok after the 2nd verse do you think it is a better improvement... plz leave feed and do you think the structure is overall better and the flow let me know...