Tonight.

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Re: Tonight.

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I remember now... the effort... I use to try n' put in//
How I use to steal Cinderella's shoes just so you could slide your foot in//
Impact on the hook..makes it catchy
I know this ain't the proper time to say what's on my mind//
I guess you were giving me signals, but I never saw the sign//
I Sence heart break story from this lol... i could see this convo kickin off
No woman's face gives me as much desire as your face does// That's why guys want you from the waist down, but I want you from the waist up//
Good impact closer
N' on the RHEA-L, I ain't trying to be best friends//
You could be the answer, there's no fighting that question//
Aha! To The Second Line
So kick ya feet up, hit this weed up, do you, do ya thing//
It's ok, a dove has to fall before it learns how to use its wings//
I Could Hear This Bar In Audio
She got me once before, now she's got me again//
Like Grams use to tell me, every tea pot needs a lid//
Consciousness is where my space ends, n' your stars be-gin//
If your eyes didn't trick me, my dreams could never be filled w/ R.E.M.//
That Was Hot Right There...credit is due

It was a great break up story of the most internal views of ones feeling for a female thats not worth it that i can relate to that i have read.....fuck if they say its soft... self concious ass niggas
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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Re: Tonight.

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I remember now... the effort... I use to try n' put in//
How I use to steal Cinderella's shoes just so you could slide your foot in//
Impact on the hook..makes it catchy
I know this ain't the proper time to say what's on my mind//
I guess you were giving me signals, but I never saw the sign//
I Sence heart break story from this lol... i could see this convo kickin off
No woman's face gives me as much desire as your face does// That's why guys want you from the waist down, but I want you from the waist up//
Good impact closer
N' on the RHEA-L, I ain't trying to be best friends//
You could be the answer, there's no fighting that question//
Aha! To The Second Line
So kick ya feet up, hit this weed up, do you, do ya thing//
It's ok, a dove has to fall before it learns how to use its wings//
I Could Hear This Bar In Audio
She got me once before, now she's got me again//
Like Grams use to tell me, every tea pot needs a lid//
Consciousness is where my space ends, n' your stars be-gin//
If your eyes didn't trick me, my dreams could never be filled w/ R.E.M.//
That Was Hot Right There...credit is due

It was a great break up story of the most internal views of ones feeling for a female thats not worth it that i can relate to that i have read.....fuck if they say its soft... self concious ass niggas
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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Re: Tonight.

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I remember now... the effort... I use to try n' put in//
How I use to steal Cinderella's shoes just so you could slide your foot in//
Impact on the hook..makes it catchy
I know this ain't the proper time to say what's on my mind//
I guess you were giving me signals, but I never saw the sign//
I Sense heart break story from this lol... i could see this convo kickin off
No woman's face gives me as much desire as your face does// That's why guys want you from the waist down, but I want you from the waist up//
Good impact closer
N' on the RHEA-L, I ain't trying to be best friends//
You could be the answer, there's no fighting that question//
Aha! To The Second Line
So kick ya feet up, hit this weed up, do you, do ya thing//
It's ok, a dove has to fall before it learns how to use its wings//
I Could Hear This Bar In Audio
She got me once before, now she's got me again//
Like Grams use to tell me, every tea pot needs a lid//
Consciousness is where my space ends, n' your stars be-gin//
If your eyes didn't trick me, my dreams could never be filled w/ R.E.M.//
That Was Hot Right There...credit is due

It was a great break up story of the most internal views of ones feeling for a female thats not worth it that i can relate to that i have read.....fuck if they say its soft... self concious ass niggas
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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Re: Tonight.

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Damn man this really needs to be recorded, or said
or filmed as a short story movie, or something dammit
you did your thing with this, it may be me, or may not
but I was listening to 9th Wonder "When I Met You" instrumental
and it just flowed together fluently, another dope piece
just a excerpt from your work...



You only saw my worst, so now you can compare-my-best//
And I know your heart is broken, so I'll watch where-I-step//
Drama is the comedy of romance, not everyone fits the part//
It's hard having a paper heart, cuz' anyone can rip it apart//
^^^^^^^^^^that was dope
I hate your use of words though you bastard
making me look bad, lulz, either way dope piece my dude
like always...if you leave this site, I'm following you though
I don't know your last name but dammit I'm following you
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