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Outta jail on bail, make a toast and fuckin stand up
Now act like 12 on the clock n get both ya fuckin hands up!
Lyrical stick up, the punches gone? forget it punk stop it
You see a ‘pier/peer over Cee’ then you better jump off it!
Sick of that soft shit, spittin asbestos, ingest n ya chest goes
Dissolved in holy water, I clean up with my blessed flows!
Their text blows, they ‘shake n I land’…outta luck like Haiti!
I’m mother natures pimp…world its fuck you pay me!
U suck then hate me, ima Beatle with the fame, a needle to a vein
No originality, fuckin communists…these people all the same
Ima beast that’s off the chain, the judge had to snap the tether
Rappers ‘hide from an animal’ like you manufacture leather!
Cee a ‘naked flame’…‘revealing heat’ in the darkest weather
Their fetal in the game, undeveloped, with raps hard as feathers!
I harvest better, man I need the light like photosynthesis!
Dykes n homos witness this, what I write no promo fit for this
Their fitness shit, lightning strikes, cant steal this gods thunder
They try to get even but their some odd numbers!
So rot, slumber, til infinity while I cruise through the duckers
Prove to the suckers, human trafficker…I move muthafuckers!
Go to war, I choose to like Ruckas, blast, i get a pass when rated
You can ask any ass who hated, I’ll turn an ass to assassinated!
I smash, they just masturbated, FACT! I write raps that’s tight
Witness Cee`s fire/cease-fire with no white flags in sight!
I don’t like a fags with spite, what u get hype n get stressed for?
Fight n get left floored, take an L like a knight on a chess board!
I took flight I was just bored, never died so no rebirth at that
Cee fell off…they thought the earth was flat, the earth I’m that…
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Cee4 wrote:Outta jail on bail, make a toast and fuckin stand up
Now act like 12 on the clock n get both ya fuckin hands up!

[Great opener!]

Lyrical stick up, the punches gone? forget it punk stop it
You see a ‘pier/peer over Cee’ then you better jump off it!

[Not bad.]

Sick of that soft shit, spittin asbestos, ingest n ya chest goes
Dissolved in holy water, I clean up with my blessed flows!

[Cool enough]

Their text blows, they ‘shake n I land’…outta luck like Haiti!
I’m mother natures pimp…world its fuck you pay me!

[Nice meta]

U suck then hate me, ima Beatle with the fame, a needle to a vein
No originality, fuckin communists…these people all the same

[That would be a punchline]

Ima beast that’s off the chain, the judge had to snap the tether
Rappers ‘hide from an animal’ like you manufacture leather!

[I'm not big on this one]

Cee a ‘naked flame’…‘revealing heat’ in the darkest weather
Their fetal in the game, undeveloped, with raps hard as feathers!

[That is what you call a paradox children]

I harvest better, man I need the light like photosynthesis!
Dykes n homos witness this, what I write no promo fit for this
Their fitness shit, lightning strikes, cant steal this gods thunder
They try to get even but their some odd numbers!

[A great rhyme and setup. One of the best punches of the week.]

So rot, slumber, til infinity while I cruise through the duckers
Prove to the suckers, human trafficker…I move muthafuckers!

[That's good too]

Go to war, I choose to like Ruckas, blast, i get a pass when rated
You can ask any ass who hated, I’ll turn an ass to assassinated!

[Sweet rhyming]

I smash, they just masturbated, FACT! I write raps that’s tight
Witness Cee`s fire/cease-fire with no white flags in sight!

[Punch of the week]

I don’t like a fags with spite, what u get hype n get stressed for?
Fight n get left floored, take an L like a knight on a chess board!

[I don't mind that]

I took flight I was just bored, never died so no rebirth at that
Cee fell off…they thought the earth was flat, the earth I’m that…

[Alright]
I can tell that you really wanted to make an impression with this one. People kind of forgetting your name around this place. Almost every punch was on point, a good mix of tight rhymes and metas. I can't find anything wrong with it at all. If you just dropped one of these a month, I think the site would be better off.

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Post by werd »

Ceems like Cee4 can 4Cee a dough'p rhyme
complexity dont leave to much else to say
write on pimp
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Post by Momeijah »

It was dope but I don't think it was near ur best. Still I'd agree with Plex about the tight rhymes and how u should drop one a month lol. Not every punch was great but they were all above par, and my favourite was probably the knight on the chess board one. On it's own it was a dope punchline drop with a good mix of humour and fire, keep droppin.
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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

I liked this alot. Nice fucking wordplay and some sick punches. If I had to bitch about one thing, it would be the little bit of filler you had here and there, but that's neither here nor there. Coming back like this is definitely going to turn heads and open some eyes. Glad to see you dropping, and hope that you are going to stick around. The site is better with you around man, no doubt about it. One.
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Post by QwarterZ »

Looks like someone lit a fire under Cee's ass
which would be strange but lol, either way a lot of nice punches in here
a lot of slick lines here and there, once in awhile I was like whaaaat?
but I see what you were doing, nothing to really say here
a lot of slick punches tho...keep it up
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Post by pablo1212 »

I can tell you took your time writing this because it came out dope . The punches were on point , and the metaphors were good too , plus that opener was sick !!... i think the flow culd of been a little better .. but other than that , keep writin ....

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