Lyrical Samurai
I use words like a katana in the hands of a samurai/
Kill your boys while you watching and then ask if you wanna try/
Blood on my hakama, cold stare in my eyes/
I light my cigarette while you try to decide/
Hoping to stop my focus, you take your sweet ass time/
before pulling your blade, you say, time to die!/
You must be high/ i sigh / you taking your stance/
One long drag I blow the smoke, you advance/
thought you'd catch me off guard/ till you hit the ground hard/
blade along your cheek leaving your face scarred/
you get up and move forward, blade clinched with both hands/ i run my sword through your waistline, splattering blood in the sand/
you hit your knees asking GOD why your life i chose to end/
I tell you Its Nothing Personal... Just Revenge/
I light another cigarette, you bleed out and life ends/
this rap shit is mine, you'll never get the #1 head band!
This was written a while back. Never got any real feed back. Be Gentle... Oh i originally posted this on Mr blunt.com
Lyrical Samurai
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Lyrical Samurai
I am the punishment of god.... Had you not Committed great sins, god would not have sent a punishment like me upon you.
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Re: Lyrical Samurai
lol, good little flow man, liking the whole visual effect of the lyrics, could picture the death duel of the 2 swordsman.. liked it man
would like to see some newer shit from ya, see if you elevated
would like to see some newer shit from ya, see if you elevated
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Re: Lyrical Samurai
Appreciate it, i am slowly getting back into the writing thing havent picked up a pen in about a year, its time to come back though!
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Re: Lyrical Samurai
right on, was going more for visuals but the next written i put i'll have to come better.
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Re: Lyrical Samurai
Tight concept, my dude. I liked the imagery you employed. You painted a vivid picture of battle in my mind. Nice drop.
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Re: Lyrical Samurai
i'm working on a part 2 but i'm thinking of a larger scale Battle.
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Re: Lyrical Samurai
This was pretty creative , and a nice concept ... the flow was alrite , and the wordplay was nothing special ... but you do have potential , so keep writing
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Re: Lyrical Samurai
yeah the flow duz let u visualize. umm i dig the samurai concept tho. jus keep writin bro.
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