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3rd String QB's topic is "Murder witness"

Deception's topic is "My super power"

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My friend approached me at the store but im always discreet with her
circumspect but not for respect to her fiance because beatings occur
I hoped for a change but the anxiety of loneliness kept her submissive
I reached out to hug her and started having a psychic premonition
she began washing dishes and he entered the door hyped with chaotic energy
yelled how worthless of a woman she was to pile on more stoic misery
fine physically but mentally exausted from being scarred and missing sleep
taken intentionally especially with him hitting her so viciously
usually a few slaps was it, but he threw and kicked her until she grabbed a knife
from the kitchen, she kicked his left knee and stabbed his right
the other remaining slashes made deep gashes penetrating like meteor craters
I flashed out, she kissed my face and said to me we should meet up later
next day I read the scenario, not from a book but instead the news paper
dna evidence said she removed his body using an apartment elevator


*Edited for grammatical errors

this was sad... i was really expecting deception to show since panda suggested

qb wins by no show

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