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if you like this or not tell me why comment please
Posted: Wed Aug 17, 2011 4:18 pm
by barsforyears
is there a problem if i talk fast,scouting these mices gusseing i should hawk that,pistol whip the ignorant brother who wanna talk back,shuryken him till the spinning kicks give him a hyadoken of a heart attack
Re: if you like this or not tell me why comment please
Posted: Thu Aug 18, 2011 12:37 am
by Alvin
Is this for real... I'm lost on what you are attempting to do? If this is a cypher, we have a section for that, if this is a written you want feed on, go to the written section, feed some other pieces, and post yours. Try making it longer so we can get a better feel for what you're throwing down. Structure it like some of the other pieces in the written section as well so we can better find the flow.
Re: if you like this or not tell me why comment please
Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2011 11:08 am
by Kulture
Fix your structure and throw in a few multies maybe, but wrong section bud.