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The Nightmare after Christmas

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A Christmas collab with zombies. Each verse is from a different character perspective. We started this last year and it never got finished (hence the verse from Cadence.) Quix decided to help us get this wrapped up.


Kuhlerblynd(Zombie)
I don't know what happened, it's like I was trapped in the casket with a million bastards
And fasten without logic everlastin but graspin on anything with some passion...
Then I lost it, I'm in the street, in this deep, and with these dudes trying to be indiscreet
I don't need the heat, I heed the weak, brains in disorder and I'm a fiend that eats...
Bringin treats, into a house, a spouse yellin on the couch Get HIM OUT!!
But I feel the need to get on the prowl, scowl with a foul accent on my brow...
And surround, the brain is mine to partake bar none's quake debate, is that the roof it came?
I wait, hunger filling my lungs, blood dribbling some, chin feels it some yet I feel it none... But I'm not ashamed...
Then I hear something coming from the brick block, this shit talk? Nah, I'm going insane
Or maybe its this hunger that makes me wanna take these corpses and eat on their brains...


Intrinsic Cadence(Kid)
It was the night before Christmas, I was waitin' for my wishlist,
cuz even though I'd been a misfit, I trusted Santa 'd give me my bliss fix.
I didn't wanna miss-this chance to see if Saint Nick truly existed,
so I stayed awake and listened for a sign that'd signify he'd arrived.
When I heard the ruckus I conducted myself quiet, but inside I sprang to life,
I lept down the steps two at a time with fluid yet muted motions, flexin' my silence.
Then I peeped two feet comin' through the flue... my anticipation grew,
but my heart skipped a beat when the “who?” came into view,
a walking dead dude rockin' a red suit with a bag full of severed limbs.
Damn! Santa wasn't one to fool around with this naughty and nice shit!


Kau the Lion(Rudolph)
I awoke in a daze to vivid pain. Looked down at my leg: see my fur being chewed off it.
A Zombie holding on. What was going on? First things first. I kicked the dude off, quick.
What happened last? The sleigh must’ve crashed. I remember my name is Rudolph. Shit!
They tried, the other deer, to get a handle on their fear but fuck the handle I just flew off it!
All I saw was red as I charged the undead, my antlers tore through ‘em like a blunderbuss.
I followed my nose through rotting foes, shanked every mother fucker in front of us!
My reindeer regiment was ready to run amok, rallied by my rage to fuck something up.
Leave these walking corpses thunderstruck. Til we exposed their soulless blood and guts.
But there was not one single sign of Kris Kringle... Shit wasn’t on the up and up.
Time to get to the bottom of this. Oh yeah, I’m a talking reindeer. So fucking what!?


Quix(Santa)
Ho HO HO!! Phew Rudolph ....
I thought it was just me ... Ho ho **cough*** Rudolph, I think I may have smoked to much of the grass
remember flying over Huttington Pass, where I thought I saw a squirrel, dodged it, and we reluctantly crashed?
I got blood all over the toys, they looking like severed heads ... next year, I'm asking for a better sled!
I'll leave Timmy a new Barbie and Jenny an Atari...I could give a Fuck what their letter said
hold up, is it me? or do i see a Zombie approaching? looking strongly provoking, but calmly I'd spoken
"You looking pissed off man, I got just the thing...hey Rudolph stop hogging the blunt you stupid Donkey and smoke-em"
Now back to the job...delivering these stuffed Panda's and skunks, this year Kid, your Manners were Fucked
your ran out of luck, and the real reason I come when your sleeping, n supposed to be a secret is because Santa's a Drunk
ok, lets go Rudolph
fireplaces? I hate the gas ones, and fucking hate cookies; leave me a Fatt Blunt and a Cup of booze Instead
did I just loose the sled?? .... FUCK!!! I just drank '2 Forties of liquor' What the fuck did you expect??
this ain't a Charlie Brown Christmas, and I ain't a Charlie model...look I ain't drunk I only Partly Swallowed
Fly a sleigh?? when I could hardly waddle? laughing like jokes on you kid, this sacks full of empty Bacardi bottles
so I guess its, Merry Christmas to all and too all a goodnight ... and a special fuck you too the 'media' and Everyone involved
so I hope you are all treasuring those dolls ...cuz next year you'll be lucky to get anything At ALL!!!



Merry Christmas, Illest!
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HAHA Dope shit fellaz...this was fun!!
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bahahha intrinscts shit had me rollin,
kaus genocidal reindeer regime was dope lol
kuhlers verse was dope but seem more serious where as everyone
elses was more of a gag an what not. Quix drunken santa
was a classic but the verses that stood out the most to me
was Intrinsicts and Kaus.. intrinsict killed the ending i think
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say whaaaaat....lol this a pretty dope piece fellas..had a nice flow to the whole story..y'all came together with a nice flip on Christmas lol...digging it...it was a crazy ass read

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word...i had fun with this piece here!!


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wow very nice guys yall make it look so easy, i really enjoyed reading this was great flowed nicely very entertaining quix cracked me up loved it!
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Lol this shit was awesome


my favorites were KAus and Quix's y'all brought a higher level of flow to your pieces

awesome collab surprised this has been getting slept on..

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aha, thanks for the feed!!
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Wow, you guys added quite the twist on this christmas post. All the verses were vivid, and I didnt even expect the santa you introduced lol. Fun post to read.
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We really appreciate all the feedback. I see this has a hundred views, so I'm kind of surprised this hasn't received more feed. Anyhow, upping this for more feedback!

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fucken krazy ass christmas...lol...im glad i wasn't awake for this shit...lol...dope bars...Quix came in and fucken freaked this shit hella...everybody did there thing...
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..........was skimming through some pieces and this came across the scanner.
I had to do a triple take on this piece of art.
Wow. It blended well. Crazy even.
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