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I spit beautiful-sciptures that'll paint ya funeral-picture
So keep ya countdown on a fix like numeral-fixtures
I summon new-sterile-mixtures of developin-songs-now
With a delicate-bomb-found in American-compounds
And may haters get foiled-or-buried by a voice-so-scary
That I can summon many things with a choice-of-many
So I can make a simple whiff from a boisenberry
Into a fatal disease thats found in a poisoned-cherry
That has been seasoned with maggots-and-cyanide
So if bitches give a reason that faggots-can-try-devise ...
Any safety, bitch I'll shove bars the size mallets-inside-ya-eye
& take ya to the forest to see if a parrot-can-cry-"Demise"
Others just ensuing-negligence who fail to make music-excellent
While I stay ill, always spitting bars with fluid-pestilence
Yall squares stink like Cubic-excrements, yall be resembling-queers
So I be mending-ya-fear, This be Link - The one who be ending-careers

What do yall think?

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Re: Quick Freestyle

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I summon new-sterile-mixtures of developin-songs-now
With a delicate-bomb-found in American-compounds
^^ nice

I liked the multis some were off but most were right on

solid lil drop nice to see you elevating.. keep working on the syllable for syllable multi scheme..

KEep rhyming
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Re: Quick Freestyle

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Apreciate the feed ... Upping for more

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the multis in this were great.

I spit beautiful-sciptures that'll paint ya funeral-picture
So keep ya countdown on a fix like numeral-fixtures
I summon new-sterile-mixtures of developin-songs-now
With a delicate-bomb-found in American-compounds
^^
these lines have to be my favorite

keep up the good work
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Post by vanity »

i really liked how u started,


"I spit beautiful-sciptures that'll paint ya funeral-picture
So keep ya countdown on a fix like numeral-fixtures
I summon new-sterile-mixtures of developin-songs-now
With a delicate-bomb-found in American-compounds
And may haters get foiled-or-buried by a voice-so-scary
That I can summon many things with a choice-of-many"

^^^^ my fav.

i enjoyed this writing great choice of words, nice multis and great flow!

very nice :)
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much appreciated ... Uppin'
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