Lmao.
Welcome to Dominoland, surrounded by mountains and flames
And a bitter red sky is surmounting the plains
Home to thousands of dames, the weird and the great
We got E in the bags and plenty beer in the crates
Carnival music drowned by the loud sound of the chains
Whips cracking chicks' asses till they're howling in pain
Bright neon signs ignite and light the night sky
Leather clad hookers in thigh highs like 'hi guys !'
Pocahontas snorting blow and boning a Roman Queen
Rolling in foam and cream as they moan groan and scream
You can only hope and dream till you pass the gates
When you see all the dancers wrapped in masking tape
Their asses shaking as they're tempting the masses waiting
Impatient bastards get their asses beat by Patrick Bateman
While he's wearing the mask of Jason, psyched and heated
This life's the sweetest believe it scream like you mean it
Like a dream it's like you got no idea how you got here
Fountains of scotch and beer from the bottom to top tier
Great wall of slot machines and dice flying around
Empty cans, coins and condoms all lie on the ground
Sounds of screaming 'don't be shy come witness the freaks !'
You'll see a guy with nine eyes and six splits in his cheek
We're all getting high from the hip chicks to the geeks
Sipping and taking big hits till we get sick for a week
We got tigers in iron chains and shackled up bitches
Dressed up as devil girls and naughty cackling witches
We got fighting in cages and the Chamber of Nightmares
And the smells of booze and blood and smoke take over the night air
I'll sit in my throne, it's made of metal, skin and bone
Got a problem with a dude then it gets settled in the dome
When the blood starts to spray it's fuckin bedlam in the zone
If you lose get on your bike and start pedaling it home
All feed returned as per.
Dominoland (The written)
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Re: Dominoland (The written)
<3 You know how I feel about Dominoland... It's like a trip inside ny own mind lol. Fkn loved it dude, transitioned nicely, painted a great picture from beginning to end - like seeing it through someone elses eyes and yours at the same time.
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Re: Dominoland (The written)
Dominioland!!! Sounds pretty dam fun lol. This piece was great, I enjoyed your imagination a lot.The imagery, punchlines, multi's and all. I look forward to reading more of your written work. Kudos!
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Re: Dominoland (The written)
I felt this piece was rather sick. You had them multies snapping the whole time, pretty much. The content was amusing, presented in a fun way. I dig that. A lot of good imagery too. A well written piece, right here, dedfinitely well worth the read. Perhaps, we can go on another trip to Dominoland in another installment of the wierd and wonderful? Stay up, man.
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Re: Dominoland (The written)
Yo the imagery on this is tight as fuck. I could mentally envision all the shit you were talking about and the flow/rhymes were also dope. In my head I was just envisioning this crazy ass city with all this shit going on, and my imagination took it from there.
9/10 on this piece, keep writin!
9/10 on this piece, keep writin!
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Re: Dominoland (The written)
You did man but it Was a victim of the April post vanishings lol.
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