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I've been on this site since the ages, haven't been here in a while some might remember me as Sequence, anyways a 16 liner i wrote and recorded the same day, uh
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=26l2NaYZO4U
THERE IS THE LINK, SLAP A LIKE ON IT IF YOU CAN BE FUCKED ^^
Bars of hell - 16
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Bars of hell - 16
..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Re: Bars of hell - 16
Nice flow, good lyrics, I won't count the accent as a negative because that's something you can't help, this would sound ill to english cats, stay at it.
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Re: Bars of hell - 16
Hey man, thanks for the feed.
Well .. you're bringing a lot of energy to this thing ... the timing is decent ... so your pretty pissed off ... Only got one verse here ... always nice to here a complete song ... If I were you ... I'd sit on the thing ... Knock out another verse and hook ... then post ... The quality seemed OK ... Level seemed good.
Stretch it out.
Well .. you're bringing a lot of energy to this thing ... the timing is decent ... so your pretty pissed off ... Only got one verse here ... always nice to here a complete song ... If I were you ... I'd sit on the thing ... Knock out another verse and hook ... then post ... The quality seemed OK ... Level seemed good.
Stretch it out.
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Re: Bars of hell - 16
i agree wit wat cyan said u need 2 strech this out i like tha verse but it b better wit a catchy hook n a verse or 2 more nice drop keep it up
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