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16 lines.

Good luck.

Topic: Daydreaming, micz picked it.

k 16 works... n e ways i doubt ppl would wanna judge a 32 bar battle.. since both of ours combined would add up to that..

i see my future pass-my-eyes, my life maximized//
stunned so i lack-surprise, i could care less if attacks-arised//
whether its facts-or-lies, my complete focus is else-where//
who else-cares? if u do, don't bother..just leave my self-there//
my self-stared as if i felt-scared, goosebumps is wat i'm gettin-from-the-trance//
my mind givin me evil thoughts that i can barely keep myself from shittin-on-my-pants//
in a corner i see a demon hidden-from-a-glance, n it looks back at me with a hateful-grin//
can't run cuz my feet will break like my ankle's-thin..n if i try to stand up they'll probably break-again//
i try not to think-of-sin, but the thoughts of it come about wonderin wat this demon-is-doin-here//
mentally shocked as if its screamin-into-my-ear, it speaks of death and its breathin-intrudes-my-fear//
i keep tellin myself to get-control-of-this, then suddenly a split-commotion-hits//
i begin to see myself from a~far as i sit-emotionless, soaked-in-piss..n i didn't slip n fall-in-pee//
i urinated from my own thoughts of a demon speakin, when it was really my own mother callin-me//
so i dry off my embarassment, get to the bed n lay-feelin cautious n now i'm afraid-seein//
mine as well be blind n displayed-kneelin, i knew i should've stayed-sleepin//
cuz my nightmares will most likely be worse than when i was day-dreamin//

I stand on a playing field where the margin of error is slim
fashion is out terror is in, an american win
impossible, rip pages from the gospil, embarrassed by sin
it's a hostile situation, awful enough to rip the nation
this isn't espn though I cant flip the station
so I have to sit and watch this shit invasion
an indication of worse to come, I still got first to run
but I'll steal a second, time runnin out, a burst of sun
gets in my face, I can't see the way, the ref calls me safe
we take the eye off the ball and we all fall from grace
I stall on base, as the pitcher throws the curve
strike, I take off and now I have my toes on third
we respect those who served, but its time we got them home
batters up, throws the ball, and it goes off the dome
I walk to the final plate, where all my teammates stand
we did it, we won, I must be day dreaming man

EkomS:
Flow: 13/15
Multis/Rhyme Scheme: 9/10
Originality: 8/10
Wordplay/Sims/Metas: 9/10
Stays On Topic: 8/10
Execution Of Topic: 3/5

Total:50

All in All an AWESOME drop


Plex:
Flow:12/15
Multis/Rhyme Scheme: 8/10
Originality: 8/10
Wordplay/Sims/Metas: 5/10
Stays on Topic: uhh =S, 4/10
Execution of topic: 2/10

Total: 39

Vote: EkomS

Multis - Complexity
Flow - Complexity
Originality - EVEN.
Stayed Of Topic - EVEN

With The Multis, I Think Complexity's Just Hit Harder.

vote-Complexity.

I cant be fucked with all the numbers and shit so i`ll just use the cats if that ok

flow- Plex
multis/rhyme scheme - Ekoms
wordplay/sims/metas - Ekoms
originality - Ekoms
stays on topic - tie
execution of topic - Ekoms

Overall Ekoms

nice battle but i think Ekoms got this by a bit. Both stayed on topic but i think Ekoms got most of the cats. Man thats a fucked up day dream tho

lol yea its all fiction just like tom's.. we all know the only "sport" he can play is chess

EkomS:

Flow: 13/15
Multies/Rhyme Scheme: 9/10
Originality: 9/10
Wordplay/Sims/Metas: 8/10
Stays on topic: 18/20
Execution of topic: 4/5

Overall: 61

Plex:

Flow: 14/15
Multies/Rhyme Scheme: 9/10
Originality: 8/10
Wordplay/Sims/Metas: 7/10
Stays On topic: 17/20
Execution of topic: 3/5

Overall: 58

Vote: EkomS

Someone update.

update wat.. isn't it 3-1

uppin... or watever u know

lets finish this vote people

this shyt has been up for a while now.. lets get some votes in or somethin

ive been gone for awhile and this shit still isnt finished

EkomS:

Flow: 13/15
Multies/Rhyme Scheme: 9/10
Originality: 8/10
Wordplay/Sims/Metas: 9/10
Stays on topic: 18/20
Execution of topic: 4/5

Overall: 61

Plex:

Flow: 14/15
Multies/Rhyme Scheme: 8/10
Originality: 9/10
Wordplay/Sims/Metas: 8/10
Stays On topic: 17/20
Execution of topic: 4/5

Overall: 60


vote: ekoms

4-1 uppin... tom let me know if i should just close and update this if no one else is gonna vote