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Topical Collab I did at another site...

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First off let me start by saying Rhap is a friend of mine at rapwars and he's been doin this African Stories series for a while, so he invited me to join him on the ninth part of the story and we made this awesome collaboration with it... if you want to see the rest of his african stories collection it's at rapwars... let me know and I'll link you...





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Panama: White


African Stories Vol. 9

We were crossing the plateau of Ethiopia, over the hills.. it was getting dark, we were looking for a secluded spot to sleep...

We laughed as we walked, but we started to tire
needed to rest before tomorrow where shots would be fired
so we found a nice spot to relax, so we sat down to eat
then started to prepare tents before we sat down to sleep...

but someone found our trail...

Still on the chase my heart races my minds thoughts
I will still find them in dark places and blind spots
A broken twig, my finger starts tracin the crime shot
No test, I can't rest till my marks wasted from nine shots
A hit, gotta find em quit, so I stalk my prey in the dark
All day, they movin on, they walk from daylight to dark
They walk, both day and night, they got a lotta passion
Still, they wont stay in sight, nope, not a lotta flashin
On track, to turn em back from ashes to ashes and dust to dust
A glimmer of hope? Nope, it's back to the ashes it wasn't rust
Which means, I can't afford to wait, nope, I got more to slay
Cause in honesty, they honestly gonna die, what more to say?
I never fail. Oh, there's the trail. They will set up camp for the night
Parched after a long march, but I still get amped for the fight


Our feet burn from the scortching sand that rolls down the hillside
it's nightfall, one watches, the rest snore on the inside
the tents are set up, with a chair outside for the guard
with coffee, hoping that fear won't gouge pride from his heart
we get comfortable to sleep hoping our watcher won't sleep
but we're worried cuz the soldier is parched from the heat
he sleeps! too comfortable, he'll be regretting for believing
cuz catching z's is death, z is the last letter for a reason...

In the heart of the dark I creep through the night
On scarred ground, their guard I spy deep in my sight
insane, it's all the same, some will die sleeping tonight
In insanity, I've killed families, why flee from the fight?
Closer and closer, I can hear his breath near to my side
Slowly I move... Damn, even so near death, fear still resides
Feelin alive, I thrive off the pleasure from the first kill
On parched mud, the blood is a treasure as thirst stills
The beast is unleashed! Still moving, silent but deadly!
A beast when released, skill proves I'm violent but ready!


*gunshots*

I wake sweating, the stakes getting high so suddenly?
bullets in the air hitting us from all sides so stunningly
i wake up, the soldier next to me falls asleep forever
another shoots blindly hoping to stall and keep them severed
i step outside, hoping our soldier is ok from last night
I see our watchguard with half his head gone on the backside
his coffee spilled on his jeans, the mug shattered on the floor
the handle rolled down the hill, almost staggered by our goal:

the enemy!

I looked at the guard, at least the last remains of him
Only a bloody pool, and mashed up brains and skin
Stone cold eyes looked up, and masked the pain within
Held up my AK, had to move fast to aim at him
Tat! Tat! Tat! I blasted his face with shots!
Despite the running I came so fast their race was lost!
My snipers sent shells slaying our foes with ease
Awake, now their praying they hope and plead
This is Africa, there are no cops to back them up
wherever we lay we spray shots and laugh it up
I see a young child, he's made man by tragedy
when at age ten he's already slain clans and families
He gives me a look, then he stands at attention
I give a command, this was planned near perfection
Bodies on the fire, the smell of burning flesh is strong
they'd fought back, finally earning the death they longed


i rubbed my eyes and watched my people shoot it out
their heads continued to drop in an almost useless count
i haven't fired a bullet, my first battle fears are forreal
but our advantage has been gained, my peers are the deal
but it's not sealed, some enemies lurk around the rocks
then one pops out, we instantly knew we found the Boss...
A one man show! we fought till our last guys were done
we fired till the kick back had our hands fried from guns
but no use, The Boss had to flank us from the left
aimed his gun at us, he lusted to bust for some deaths
he creeped behind our soldier, killed him quietly wit a knife
then popped out from behind a rock, violently with a stride
and shot wildly, open fired while running towards us
some turned to run, they were simply running outta luck
he picked them off from distance, and strutted some more
till he walked up to the guard with the mug on the floor...

First before it gets worse it's time to hide the corpse away
ten tents in the camp that I've spied theres more to slay
silent as the breeze I ease my way to the top of the hills
sip Scotch by the rocks I see I got the drop on my kills
Faster, I move like a master laying bombs down in a line
Through hues I tie off the fuse I'm calm now is the time
Behind a boulder, AK to my shoulder, I set a light to the fuse
An explosion! This corrosion will get the fighting confused!
At the site I'm amused, aready most of the host is slain
I shoot a few, but the rest I've chosen will roast in pain

*grins*

I walk by the last of the livin, smile as they ask for forgivin
My AK flashes, in the ashes, it's blast is the last thing they're given
As they die I spy a set of footprints leading out to the sands
I turn my face, he's earned a chase, I'll leave him bleeding out in the sands


I'm still alive, but almost all of our people are dead
there was like three left, we were all weak so we left
we ran for our lives, we fled to the bottom of the hills
The Boss stood up on top and watched us with a thrill
we ran and ran, across the desert back to our homes
and explained how we were attacked with a gat to the dome
a seargent came and asked, "happened to you?"
we told him how one guy took out half of our group..



To Be Continued...


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Post by ÐÛÇ£» »

Hella Nice Story Line...You Fuckin Lucky I Took Out Tha Time To Read It Lmaooo Most Peeps On Tha Site To Lady....Nice Execution...Multis Was On Point....LoL Only Bad Thing I Say It Was HELLA Long..But Yeah Nice Drop...And Welcome To Illest.
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thats was a brilliant story obviously long but i dont really care
i liked the flow stayed on point and nice multies

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Post by Panama »

Thanks guys... also I been on the site before.. it's just been a while..
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Word.. nyce shyt bruh.. imagery was off da chartzz
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Thanks for the feed guys... uppin...
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Damn Son..
This Shit Wus Long But Hott...
Liked How Creative u Wuz..Multis & Flow Wus On Point..

Stay Active Again lol
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lol, I'll try... busy ass life gets in the way :lol:
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