hey guys its been months since i have written a rhyme because well i was not that good and i was concentrating to get into law school though now im in law school i did not get time to write rhymes untill i got injured while rowing and had spinal surgery though i have recovered enough i could not do ...

How easily things become ineffective
planes flying,parties crashin
sittin with a chick flier than a g6
revolutionaries-
evolutionaries working with reluctance of the bread
but freakin question is always bugging my head
who knows the government might be buggin your bed
fukin in the bed, bitches ...

nice stuff up der but well you gotta structure your work i also did the same thing at first and then i myself realised there's no use putting this into paragraphs, i mean even if the song is supa dope it wont be easy to find the flow in paragraphs
though these are just ideas but be carefull to put ...

woah man this is sick
pretty nice drop keep it goin...

this right here is as dope as it gets
pretty tight s#it right here man.
Two thumbs up! Keep it up man!

nice kit mate

Haters put my freakin track,
on the fader/
i choose the best thats why im goin,
all black like darth wader/
Im not drake so you can't,
thank me now
if you try put me down,
so see you later/
my verses are getting greater,
by the minute the crowds are wider/
life is white,but death is brighter ...

thx guys for your replies... I knw i suck, well cuz im new to the game, but i guess il become better.
So keep the criticism up....

-- Fri Dec 24, 2010 3:15 pm --

Baby i knw i broke ur heart,
but this freakin world cant take us apart/
dont think dis a freakout,just dont-do-the-depart
seeing u every ...

Baby i knw i broke ur heart,
this world cant take us apart/
seeing u everyday,
make me feel like its a holiday/
baby il give u shade,
but i think u need to stand a little closer/
life's just given once,
baby dont use it twice,im not gonna ask u thrice/
i guess u gotta throw the dice,
dont think ...

wow thx alightning reply man
actually iv got many rhymes which have a proper subject. The thing is that im new to this site to i wanted to put my out of the blue non sense first to see what types of replies i get and to tell you the truth im getting pretty positive replies
its just been a day on ...

Never finished up work-still goin on vacation/
no more freakin need for dat bitch finnisha
and its my time to finish-ya/
Im taking down the charisma-
chachacha on ya bitches/
Im keepin dark wishes,
I still keep the lights on/
You better look at me,look at my work
I do it 10 times ur lead single/
and ...

well thanks for the reply man..
Ya actually my pc blew up last week so had to put it up through my mobile
and thx for ur views actually its only been like 3 months since iv started writing and wanted some sort of guidence as im living in India the rap scene here is some what...u know....
Well then i ...

Why addictions cant be good, seduction ought to be good,and it is impossible to make -reductions to the answer,get grab of those peaches,and the preachers cant just reach us,and make weak us,they tryin to find my breaking-point, i guess dats the reason for the breakup -right,till den i was scared to ...