Yeah... the flow could be tightened with more/longer multies, I suppose.
But, if you read this at a good pace, without too much a pause in or between lines the flow
should be easier to find.
This was initally written to an image, but decided not to add it to this post.

I actually did this about 3 ...

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The last gift of planets... Hosting One final Reach forth for Mankind
Meeting their challenge... Leaping bounds out of beliefs... Tortures in Time
Of coarse... The more they'd try... The more disheartened they'd all soon become
With a chorus of cries distorting desires... Conclusive... Done ...

Nice multies and churning of concepts. Creativity was entertaining, vocabs good, delivery fell off towards the end, though.
A little filler here and there... but nothing to sweat.

Not bad.
Stay up.

Entertaining to some extent.
Felt most your inners were too predictable, as well as your end rhymes/multies.
Try to brainstorm more with your wording and vocab, shit'll just come to you eventually.
W/plays aiight, nothing with a "wow" factor, but decent.
Some of the concepts you went with were ...