Thanks alot for the feedback, I'll restructure everything after I finish my current song, though.

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I made this for my English class as a Slam. I talk about my best friend, the 1st 2 bars are simple, the 2nd half is intermediate and I complex up my flow and rhymes at the 3rd part of this rap. Appreciate the feed back, thanks.

The day I met you, you seemed like someone I could trust
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Yee I didn't put much time in..I'll put more time next time Thanks though

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Thanks for the feedback bro. Yep, this is on my depression times..but I'll definitely put more effort next time..

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This is my first post here.. I starting rapping since a year..but I stopped, although I just started again.. I'm not really good but here to improve..
These are a few bars on a instrumental I got a weak ago..

Hook: (Sampled)

Where is the sea
I don't why I was just looking for the sea
But the only ...