lil poem i made thought i'd drop it 4 yall..
6 o clock struck and my hands began to shiver
a cold sensation ran from head to my liver
eyes blurry and mind outta control
tryna figure out how to get rid
of this gaping hole in my soul
i stare at her picture tears fall free
smearing the words on the letter
'dont hesitate to call me'
franctically dialing hoping to hear the truth from within
but still feeling like she wants to be with him
runinng across her lawn each footstep is weary
crossing the point of no return i hope she hears me
knocking on the door anxious to see her face
she opens the door grabs my arm
and leads me around her place
candles placed so perfect as if cupid was around
im thinking am i stupid.....o wow
i asked 4 her hand and these words
came right off my tongue
can we start over?cuz The Night Is Still Young
leave sum feed plz..-1-
The Night Is Still Young
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it was good man. overall it was a solid piece.
i asked 4 her hand and these words
came right off my tongue
can we start over?cuz The Night Is Still Young
^favorite lines.
Their was good emotion and imagery.I know this isn't rap, but for some reason it seemed to have a nice flow. good job.
stay up and keep dropin.
i asked 4 her hand and these words
came right off my tongue
can we start over?cuz The Night Is Still Young
^favorite lines.
Their was good emotion and imagery.I know this isn't rap, but for some reason it seemed to have a nice flow. good job.
stay up and keep dropin.
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