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I Am American #4 ft. M.O.E

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The American Dream

Plex - I'm an extreme genie-us- the genie-is in the bottle, extremists follow
dreams that I borrow from my mother, seeing tomorrow, just another
day of screaming sorrow, bloodier than the day before, depraved and poor
we should invade darfur because they are enslaving children, but its the age of killin
raisin billions to fight a war, that couldn't have saved them buildings
regan villains, rake in millions, we don't have a stake in drillin, mistakin billin
we still pay ridiculous prices for gas because of speculators, the theft is major
our debt is greater, next door they have a lex, makes me want to go and wreck my neighbors
no investment papers, we don't book vacations nomore, crooks took the nation
look at what we are facin, a recession that isn't about to end
Bush's statements after 9/11, go out and spend, then they kick push inflation
and we are suppose to count on them, look at my check, I know I made this amount
I dont have interest in my savings account, fuck money in the bank, I'm taking it out
we are worried about how much the i pod costs, more than job loss, foreign bombin
isn't important, we listen to jay z more than common, its the war with osama bin laden
that obamas bin talkin, America's the dominate continent, i want to start a new nation
when we have twisted reporters that are trying to boost ratings with untrue statements
fuck these wars, we should persue greatness, the public option makes us lose patients
we approach every subject with two faces, basically we are too facist
ur rebuttles are proved baseless like military special ops, the latest, epilogue
I stretch, then I get to jog, your memory to depths that should be left to God
yet I don't threat the job, the lexicon plex is on is a whole other echelon
guess your wrong if you thought an Amera-con would drop anything less than bombs


M.O.E. - The government gona straightn up thats a frail-doubt...
who can move up when these rich boys keep gettin bailed-out//

but wat about me, complexity, and the otha mc's workin a 9-ta-5...
who are barely sliden-by, saven up our xtra cash to stylelize//

so now we rhymen-lines, for a hobbie that the government just-doesnt-like...
they tryna kill us off and tell us dat wat we did just-wasnt-right//

we are da ones dey want-ta-fight, to them we are just a roll-of-da-dice...
cuz only 1 0f da 6 will be livin nice, while the rest fall old-to-da-price//*

they wana be controlin-da-mice, like da kids on da-computer...
they need us to buy but how can we get money wit no distrubuter//

so for back up dey send in da-recruter,to get me in da army...
why? so they can harm-me, make me shit or trash and make me feel sorry//

for da person-that-I-am, then I'll have to send my verses-ta-my-fam//
in the letters dat ill send, while im prayen that my head wont be bustin-on-da-land//

Im cursen-to-da-damd, cuz da government, is like da blasted-devil...
they had me sign my soul away for a lil plastic-medal//

cant express myself cuz dey hate it... but i'll text-it-tho...
still can't find a job cuz dey sent dem all ta Mexico//**

I have a dream 2!!! of bein iced out lika eskamo, so ima let-it-go...
so if the worlds testn-MOE, i'll grab dat gat and press-it-ho//

now im arrested mayne, and they maken me surrender-my-fame...
government fucks me once agayn, by given me a lawyer who can't remember-my-name//

so now da government wins, and adds to my pains...
even tho Obamas in.... don't be expectn for a change//


I'll leave feed on some drops tomorrow. Thanks to M.O.E. for this drop.
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thanks for the offer to collab good shit
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ayo this wasnt bad at all, plex ur shit is nice dude i feel the way u flowin em but i think ur shud try to type ur lines out a lil different but whatever its all good ur flow n multies where there and the content was nice too

M.O.E.- urs was good too but i think u could work at it a little try but a little more complex lol no pun intended but like just try use a lil more multies/inners/ maybe up ya vocab a little,

nice drop yall
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JHaze wrote:ayo this wasnt bad at all, plex ur shit is nice dude i feel the way u flowin em but i think ur shud try to type ur lines out a lil different but whatever its all good ur flow n multies where there and the content was nice too

M.O.E.- urs was good too but i think u could work at it a little try but a little more complex lol no pun intended but like just try use a lil more multies/inners/ maybe up ya vocab a little,

nice drop yall
I agree the structure was hideous on this monster. Partly because I really wanted to get this collab done and partly because two parts were written at completely different times. I think I made some decent points though and that is what this drop was suppose to be about.
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Post by The Gonz »

Word, this was a nice collab. Yall brought out some good points and shed light on some issues that keep falling from the public's view because of dumb shit like celebrity's dying and other shit that should be in the tabloids, not breaking news. Nice shit yall.
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thanks for all the feed guys
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I'm an extreme genie-us- the genie-is in the bottle, extremists follow
dreams that I borrow from my mother, seeing tomorrow, just another
day of screaming sorrow, bloodier than the day before, depraved and poor
we should invade darfur because they are enslaving children, but its the age of killin
raisin billions to fight a war, that couldn't have saved them buildings

Nasty .. Loved The How Meaningful it Was Plus The Nas Feel....


regan villains, rake in millions, we don't have a stake in drillin, mistakin billin
we still pay ridiculous prices for gas because of
< Wasnt Feeling.. speculators, the theft is major


our debt is greater, next door they have a lex, makes me want to go and wreck my neighbors
no investment papers, we don't book vacations nomore, crooks took the nation

Alright.. Multis On Point.. Starting To Bubble

look at what we are facin, a recession that isn't about to end
Bush's statements after 9/11, go out and spend, then they kick push inflation
and we are suppose to count on them, look at my check, I know I made this amount
I dont have interest in my savings account, fuck money in the bank, I'm taking it out

LMAO!.. Loved The Last Part...Word


we are worried about how much the i pod costs, more than job loss, foreign bombin
isn't important, we listen to jay z more than common, < Word..
its the war with osama bin laden
that obamas bin talkin, America's the dominate continent, i want to start a new nation
when we have twisted reporters that are trying to boost ratings with untrue statements

LoL Nice.. Like How you Goin in

fuck these wars, we should persue greatness, the public option makes us lose patients
we approach every subject with two faces, basically we are too facist

Feeling That..


ur rebuttles are proved baseless like military special ops, the latest, epilogue
I stretch, then I get to jog, your memory to depths that should be left to God
yet I don't threat the job, the lexicon plex is on is a whole other echelon
guess your wrong if you thought an Amera-con would drop anything less than bombs

Lmfao .. That Was Put Together Well, Way To End It.



Real Dope Verse.. Topic Raped On your Part..




M.O.E. - The government gona straightn up thats a frail-doubt...
who can move up when these rich boys keep gettin bailed-out//

Ok..

but wat about me, complexity, and the otha mc's workin a 9-ta-5...
who are barely sliden-by, saven up our xtra cash to stylelize//

Feeling This...

so now we rhymen-lines, for a hobbie that the government just-doesnt-like...
they tryna kill us off and tell us dat wat we did just-wasnt-right//

Really Liked This But .. The Second Line Could Be Threaded Together So Much Better..

we are da ones dey want-ta-fight, to them we are just a roll-of-da-dice...
cuz only 1 0f da 6 will be livin nice, while the rest fall old-to-da-price//*

Ok...

they wana be controlin-da-mice, like da kids on da-computer...
they need us to buy but how can we get money wit no distrubuter//

Alright...

so for back up dey send in da-recruter,to get me in da army...
why? so they can harm-me, make me shit or trash and make me feel sorry//

Coo..

for da person-that-I-am, then I'll have to send my verses-ta-my-fam//
in the letters dat ill send, while im prayen that my head wont be bustin-on-da-land//

No...

Im cursen-to-da-damd, cuz da government, is like da blasted-devil...
they had me sign my soul away for a lil plastic-medal//

Lol..Kinda Funny

cant express myself cuz dey hate it... but i'll text-it-tho...
still can't find a job cuz dey sent dem all ta Mexico//**

No..

I have a dream 2!!! of bein iced out lika eskamo, so ima let-it-go...
so if the worlds testn-MOE, i'll grab dat gat and press-it-ho//

lol

now im arrested mayne, and they maken me surrender-my-fame...
government fucks me once agayn, by given me a lawyer who can't remember-my-name// LoL funny

so now da government wins, and adds to my pains...
even tho Obamas in.... don't be expectn for a change//

Ok...


The Begginin Of your Verse Was Def Stronger Then The Rest.. you Just Went Real Weak & All Over The Place To Me.
You shoulda Use More References..Lyrically your Verse was ok.


Over This Collab Was Pretty Straight
Averaged Out 7/10.

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