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Momeijah
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Part Of This Diss For a Fake Bastard LoL

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Uh Yeah This is My Diss For This Fake Fucker Symbolic. He'd Be Like "im 1 Of The Best Rappers in The USA" n Shit Lmao And Pretended He Had Audio He Always Had a Queer Excuse Not 2 Send Me. i Took Like 2 Days 2 Record an Audio And He's On Msn Like "Damn ur Slow, u Call Yourself a Rapper?" And im Like "Yeah Says The Guy Who i Aint Even Heard 1 Audio From" Hahaha So Yeah Thats How The Beef Started n Explanations n Shit For The Verse...Doin it Over The Lil Wayne "Fireman" Beat LoL.

i'll Show u Why They "Call-Me-Domino" ..//
i Demolish "Corny-Common-Flows" ..//
i Tolerated u, Until u "Calmly-Rocked-The-Boat" ..//
it "Set-a-Fuse" Now ur "Set-To-Lose" ..//
i'll "Step-To-You" Anyday Son ur Not a "Threat-Be-Sure" ..//
Callin Me "Slow-With-Tracks"..But "Where's ur-Audio?" ..//
i Out "Flowed-This-Wack" Bastard, With "Takes-He-Prolly-Wrote" ..//
Sittin in ur Room Sayin "im-in-The-Studio" ..//
i'll Rip The Face Off This Fool, Only "Wack-Shit-u-Truly-Wrote" ..//
Who Puts a Supermodel Pic Up Like "That's-My-Girl" ..//
Thats Almost as Believable as ur "Black-With-Curls" ..//
u Fuckin Wigger, Step To Me You'd Need a "Stair-Lift" ..//
ur "impared-Spits" Make it "Unfair-Bitch" To "Bully-You" ..//
Ya "Truly-Through", None Of Ya Sad Lies Will Ever Make Me "Cool-With-u" ..//
u Desperate Bum, Kiss My Knuckles, And i Might "Give-You-a-Break" ..//
Cuz For The Sake Of ur Health u Dont Wnna Fight "With-Me-Again" ..//


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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

this one kinda left me hangin wit some of the lines (punches) like you had somethin goin then you jus left em' ouot there to hang around. some played lines but you could of made em work if you would of finished them. over all it was still a pretty good verse, but not your best. keep at it!!!!
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by Subsist »

isnt ur best but its harder to wriht for audio cause you want your lyrics to flow good so cant get too complex , ive seen you using more similies though and i enjoyed those. I wanna listen to the audio.
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Post by drunken jesus »

this was alright, for a diss it wasn't really too punchline heavy

one thing you need to work on is your multis, alotta them don't really rhyme
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Post by critan »

I could see where you were trying to go-good verse-im not big on making things rhyme a whole lot but it could have used a little more connections
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Post by Invincible »

Not too bad..But it just reminds me of a person on her that was doing the same thing. Posting disses when a person isn't even here unless he is and then I'm asking "why isn't this in the audio section".
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