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As I stand aside watchin' as the passin' lives
pass the mine, or pass the mind like pantomimes
I dance to this trance of mine, with active lights
my passion lies in the eyes of the inactive life
where packed in rhymes release like passionite nights
hey darling snatch is fine on those very pants I eye
I moooovvveee.....
dancin' to this melody that hypnotizes telepathy
the flower moves elegantly as I can smell in the breeze
perfume, fragrance, followed by the foul flagrent
whistle at you honey save it, buzz off or chase it?
thoughts so basic but seem so advanced in placement
abrasive, amazed with sensibilty switched with anger
DANGER, one sting could kill ya my lovely stranger
I move to your sway, the yellow tells me stay away
the black makes a change, your oh so near yet fadeaway
what a moooooment....
and I'm gone..............my bad....

LoL! I gotta get to work....I don't know what to call this?

hmmmmm ehhhhhhhh
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i agree wit theoneyouhate, the imigary was crazy, it seems more like a poem than n e thing else. but good none the less
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hmmm QZ, this seems like Distilled Thoughts... with the broken structure and the metaphores (at least the 2nd part was)... what's with the moans and groans LOL..
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i agree wit tha above shit paintz a nice lil picture only thing i didn't like was tha overload of multis at some partz cuz ya coulda fit more and expanded a dope topic
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