I Am American #6 - Radical Empire

[complexity]

yo, woke up this morning, thought I'd ride a bike or go on a ten mile hike/
feeling childlike, I pointed at the sky, it was wildlife/
not a flying kite, what a surprising sight through that shining light/
I was inspired, it was time to write, I was on fire, dynamite/
I'm not the science type, one might see this black and white/
let's skip past the hype, tell me if these facts are right/
we can fix cracks in a shuttle for a Nasa flight, elect Eric Massa twice/
map a massive strike on the Taliban from a track device with a satellite/
yet we can't be that concise to patch a pipe with some fast advice/
I feel trapped like pac at a traffic light, my active life has been slashed to pieces/
with a plastic knife, applying an adhesive, I dropped from the top like a faulty ski lift/
I fell off, Alex Wright, people are so facetious, I'll never go back to that like an elastic band/
rather crash a van, be trapped in sand, during a traffic jam with a catholic man in Packistan/
I've got a fantastic plan, maybe I'll sell contraband, there's a strong demand/
but I don't want to be a common man, in "Zombieland", like an Obama fan/
boarding a plane with a bomb in hand, about to drop it on Iran/
I pass the full body scan, and the god damn sonogram/
its all a scam, with a media twist, writers have a huge void to fill/
the good ones aren't getting plugged like that oil spill/
we had a choice to drill, but we enjoy the thrill to destroy and kill/
its all water under the bridge, the rivers just poison filled/
and the boys are still getting raped by priests, you have to sit back in awe/
while the congress is passing laws, I'm on the street cracking jaws/
these hacks and frauds, lack a cause, I'll show them a real act of God/
not a back massage, a complete hatchet job on a catholic mob with an axe and saw/
critics attack my flaws, claim I'm spitting vial hate, at least I don't inspire child rape/
how long will we decide to wait, how many kids do they need to violate?/
we also have sickos in cyberspace, is this a mile race or just a wild chase/
every minute another violent case is filed in a safe, or thrown in a fireplace/
which flies in the face of those who are lying awake crying, suicide, trying to escape/
I'd rather acquire a taste for dieting shakes then make that giant mistake/
while this radical empire is a fortress of hate, its time to force the debate/
grab a torch and a stake, for supporting this horror estate/
the churches worst historical case of unreported torture and rape/
first we conquered a dictatorial state when chasing oil, now we destroy kill and slay/
murdering animals, in the most deplorable way with a royal display of moral decay/
its important to say, our troops are great, don't hate on memorial day/
but we are not out of the woods, yes, I'll resort to an old forest cliche/

[- Mutual -]

aye plex this is dope as hell, it had one whole consistent flow, the multies were dope all the way through

and the boys are still getting raped by priests, you have to sit back in awe/
while the congress is passing laws, I'm on the street cracking jaws/
these hacks and frauds, lack a cause, I'll show them a real act of God/
not a back massage, a complete hatchet job on a catholic mob with an axe and saw/
critics attack my flaws, claim I'm spitting vial hate, at least I don't inspire childrape/
how long will we decide to wait, how many kids do they need to violate/

dope mayne dope how the hell you write this well i'll never know i hope to get too your level as i progress through rap, dope read here plex and keep droppin

[complexity]

aye plex this is dope as hell, it had one whole consistent flow, the multies were dope all the way through

and the boys are still getting raped by priests, you have to sit back in awe/
while the congress is passing laws, I'm on the street cracking jaws/
these hacks and frauds, lack a cause, I'll show them a real act of God/
not a back massage, a complete hatchet job on a catholic mob with an axe and saw/
critics attack my flaws, claim I'm spitting vial hate, at least I don't inspire childrape/
how long will we decide to wait, how many kids do they need to violate?/

dope mayne dope how the hell you write this well i'll never know i hope to get too your level as i progress through rap, dope read here plex and keep droppin

You will. And being scrupulously careful, over dedicated, and slightly OCD. For example, when I wake up, I'll make at least 10-15 edits on this piece. Even after people have left feedback.

I really appreciate the feedback, exaggerated as it may be. I'll return the favor, of course.

[MOEstradamus]

yo, woke up this morning, thought I'd ride a bike or go on a ten mile hike/
feeling childlike, I pointed at the sky, it was wildlife/
not a flying kite, what a surprising sight through that shining light/
I was inspired, it was time to write, I was on fire, dynamite/
I'm not the science type, one might see this black and white/
let's skip past the hype, tell me if these facts are right/
we can fix cracks in a shuttle for a Nasa flight, elect Eric Massa twice/
map a massive strike on the Taliban from a track device with a satellite/
yet we can't be that concise to patch a pipe with some fast advice/
liked this bit last 3 lines are real as fuck good shit on those the other lines at the beginning had great flow and multis but nothen that made me go o damn that was sick
I feel trapped like pac at a traffic light, my active life has been slashed to pieces/
with a plastic knife, applying an adhesive, I dropped from the top like a faulty ski lift/
I fell off, people are so facetious, I'll never go back to that like an elastic band/
rather crash a van, be trapped in sand, during a traffic jam with a catholic man in Packistan/
I've got a fantastic plan, maybe I'll sell contraband, there's a strong demand/
but I don't want to be a common man, in "Zombieland", like an Obama fan/
boarding a plane with a bomb in hand, about to drop it on Iran/
I pass the full body scan, and the god damn sonogram/
flow thru me off in one spot nice multis had a couple really good lines
its all a scam, with a media twist, writers have a huge void to fill/
the good ones aren't getting plugged like that oil spill/
we had a choice to drill, but we enjoy the thrill to destroy and kill/
its all water under the bridge, the rivers just poison filled/
and the boys are still getting raped by priests, you have to sit back in awe/
while the congress is passing laws, I'm on the street cracking jaws/
these hacks and frauds, lack a cause, I'll show them a real act of God/
not a back massage, a complete hatchet job on a catholic mob with an axe and saw/
critics attack my flaws, claim I'm spitting vial hate, at least I don't inspire child rape/
how long will we decide to wait, how many kids do they need to violate?/
we also have sickos in cyberspace, is this a mile race or just a wild chase/
every minute another violent case is filed in a safe, or thrown in a fireplace/
which flies in the face of those who are lying awake crying, suicide, trying to escape/
I'd rather acquire a taste for dieting shakes then make that giant mistake/
while this radical empire is a fortress of hate, its time to force the debate/
grab a torch and a stake, for supporting this horrible fate/
the churches worst historical case of unreported torture and rape/
first we conquered a dictatorial state when chasing oil, now we destroy kill and slay/
murdering animals, in the most deplorable way with a royal display of moral decay/
its important to say, our troops are great, don't hate on memorial day/
liked this last part again you are spittin about pure tru you are not forcing any topic here (and by that to some of the slower members that means hes not bullshitin about him dealin and killin) good shit i liked this but it wasnt your best work id give it a 7.5/10

ive got a fantastic plan, maybe I'll sell contraband, there's a strong demand/
but I don't want to be a common man, in "Zombieland", like an Obama fan/

this was my favorite bar by far good shit on this one

[trubblecleff]

the rap is really nice but the message was inspiring i think that more than ur skill as a rapper is what makes this really good and it didnt seem like u had to stretch to much to make it happen it was smoothe an easy read but not stop rhymes should please n e fan loved it

[complexity]

the rap is really nice but the message was inspiring i think that more than ur skill as a rapper is what makes this really good and it didnt seem like u had to stretch to much to make it happen it was smoothe an easy read but not stop rhymes should please n e fan loved it

The message was inspiring, really? Think you may need to read the piece again. There is not one uplifting bar.

Thanks for reading it though.

[MOEstradamus]

lol at plex

[FlipSide]

its all a scam, with a media twist, writers have a huge void to fill/
the good ones aren't getting plugged like that oil spill/

fuuccckkk dude

and the boys are still getting raped by priests, you have to sit back in awe/
while the congress is passing laws, I'm on the street cracking jaws/
these hacks and frauds, lack a cause, I'll show them a real act of God/
not a back massage, a complete hatchet job on a catholic mob with an axe and saw/

this just sick wit it

Every subject touched depicted with a point made for ur views on them...the oil spill...catholic criminalism..all that..i just quoted this cuz i aint wanna keep scrollin but the whole u dig was off tha meat rack!

[eMCee Havic]

we can fix cracks in a shuttle for a Nasa flight, elect Eric Massa twice/
map a massive strike on the Taliban from a track device with a satellite/
yet we can't be that concise to patch a pipe with some fast advice/
feel trapped like pac at a traffic light, my active life has been slashed to pieces/
with a plastic knife, applying an adhesive, I dropped from the top like a faulty ski lift/
I fell off, people are so facetious, I'll never go back to that like an elastic band/
rather crash a van, be trapped in sand, during a traffic jam with a catholic man in Packistan

shit juss rolled right there the rest was good didnt really notice a "Consistant flow" but overall nice be a good audio

[complexity]

we can fix cracks in a shuttle for a Nasa flight, elect Eric Massa twice/
map a massive strike on the Taliban from a track device with a satellite/
yet we can't be that concise to patch a pipe with some fast advice/
feel trapped like pac at a traffic light, my active life has been slashed to pieces/
with a plastic knife, applying an adhesive, I dropped from the top like a faulty ski lift/
I fell off, people are so facetious, I'll never go back to that like an elastic band/
rather crash a van, be trapped in sand, during a traffic jam with a catholic man in Packistan

shit juss rolled right there the rest was good didnt really notice a "Consistant flow" but overall nice be a good audio

I think there was a consistent grammar to it. But at times, I just went in on strings of rhymes for effect.

[QwarterZ]

This was siiiiiiiiick! I was thinkin' bout writing somethin' like this
then again I don't think I woulda pulled it off like you wouldve, very smooth flow
nice multi's this whole piece deserves a lot of praise man
I'm diggin' it...keep writing!