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K KiLLaH
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Im versatile with flows how my styling goes
Violence n blows unload in the wildest scrolls
Always the brighter writer as my stylus glows
Im the lyrical life sentence at ya trials for show
Y'all know im the better letter ur denials exposed
Ya love ta hate i love the hate my every smile you loathe
If I hitcha you wit every miracle that i could compose..
The finishing T.K.O. Im piledriving ya soul
See me in a keystyle you mild typers are slow
"D"-"O" PE's-Know i gotta vicadin flow
Gotcha bars lockdown im like rikers wit those
Da "type" you cant "escape" so "save ya files" for toes
haha..
Childish foes the fundamentals you lack
Thought you had the blueprint till ya stencil collapsed
How you gon eat my food you need untensils for that
The only time you pop lead is when ya pencils get snapped!!
Aiyo my mental is wrapped so I mentally rap
Bout the game n politics, Im credentially stacked
Im about to run for office keep the century black
Talking smack, nuke IRAQ n get eventually clapped - HOLLA!!
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Post by Bearded Fury »

This purdy hot like the fire
I'm diggin' your lines you the supplier
you got skills for days, I admire
now get back to writing more.....papaya
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Post by FlipSide »

Always the brighter writer as my stylus glows
Nice line here
How you gon eat my food you need untensils for that
The only time you pop lead is when ya pencils get snapped!!
Dope line here..

Over all the whole piece flowed well but there were parts in there that either went over my head or had no real relative meaning.. Im not talking shit cuz i know u can make it sound right on the mic... but looks a lil weird when put into text... other than that its a different style and i can dig that... nice to see u droppin something written for a change... ups
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Post by ScottJames »

yeah, i liked this, short n simple. rhymed very well, good use of multis n vocab here. i liked it
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Re: For Your Entertainment

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KiLLaH Stop Fuckin Round.. Let's Go Audio
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Post by young_jobe »

k killah yo multi's klean.. guud work..

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good look fam
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Post by complexity »

K KiLLaH wrote:Im versatile with flows how my styling goes
Violence n blows unload in the wildest scrolls
Always the brighter writer as my stylus glows
Im the lyrical life sentence at ya trials for show

[Actually not very impressed with this]

Y'all know im the better letter ur denials exposed
Ya love ta hate i love the hate my every smile you loathe
If I hitcha you wit every miracle that i could compose..
The finishing T.K.O. Im piledriving ya soul

[Best part about that was the punch at the end]

See me in a keystyle you mild typers are slow
"D"-"O" PE's-Know i gotta vicadin flow
Gotcha bars lockdown im like rikers wit those
Da "type" you cant "escape" so "save ya files" for toes
haha..

[Decent wordplay if not a bit weak wording]

Childish foes the fundamentals you lack
Thought you had the blueprint till ya stencil collapsed
How you gon eat my food you need untensils for that
The only time you pop lead is when ya pencils get snapped!!

[Favorite set of bars]

Aiyo my mental is wrapped so I mentally rap
Bout the game n politics, Im credentially stacked
Im about to run for office keep the century black
Talking smack, nuke IRAQ n get eventually clapped - HOLLA!!

[Not a big fan]
Overall. I thought you didn't have a strong enough set of rhymes to be holding the scheme for as long as you did. I've seen you hold a scheme for longer in a much more impressive fashion and maybe you're becoming too reliant on the simple (AB 4 lines) structure because it seems as if sometimes you're trying to hard to get to the next scheme.
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Re: For Your Entertainment

Post by Loon E Lou »

Cre@T!Ve wrote:KiLLaH Stop Fuckin Round.. Let's Go Audio


^^^^i dunno dawg. i heard Killah Kills!!!!!
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