TEARS FROM HEAVEN

[Slicka]

I made a promise to ya, and im gunna keep it real/
no more bangin on tha block gunshots or drug deals/
i remember when you passed i burst inta tears/
the only one i could trust wit my secrets thru the years/
when i was sick you were their....wanna let you know i care/
feel the presence of ya soul you never left your still here/
you'll neva be forgotten just reserved in my heart/
its a special place for you no one can take ya spot/
nothin can make me happy still havin all these thoughts/
can't believe that your gone in my mind n soul im lost/
i look up at the stars i know thats where you are/
but it still hurts inside with you gone its so hard/
cant believe that it happend but im prayin up ta god/
everyday i think of you its neva gunna stop/
you maybe gone but alive in memory/
i love ya its time ta let you rest in peace/

audio version coming soon going to upload the beat so you can hear it when you readin it this is jus verse 1

[Deception]

was a nice little drop, basic rhyme scheme imo, but for memorial peaces the emotions impact and stand out more. the only thing i could probably say is to increase imagery in the drop. ive just had my dad die and i did a verse like this ill post it on here but i felt after that i could have done better. so if you wanna do a collab on this im down.

keep elevating tho.

peace

[Slicka]

yeah i got 2 verses written........the 3rd verse is open if you want on the track

[Deciple]

i liked the beat, i wasnt fond of the sample, but your lyrics are nice, good verse so far, the collab should be sick..

[Phasewon]

This is real shit and that's impossible to hate on, smooth easy flow to match a smooth easy beat, but it's 2010 and you're still not up on double syllables? The message tip was nice but I'd suggest searching a lil deeper for those rhymes.

[QwarterZ]

This was more emotionally driven then it was trying to show lyrical prowess which is cool...but I think you held back on your emotion a bit I mean when people express themselves like this they get real in depth on their pain which I felt you just went reeeeeal tip of the ice berg with...if u know what I mean nonetheless it was a cool lil drop my dude...cant wait to hear the collab it may translate better then the written

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[Slicka]

thanks i appreciate the feed ^

[Dana Riot]

I like it I look forward to hearing the audio because it had a nice flow. Like everyone else said it was just straight from the heart and it was easy to tell, I love pieces like these it's always interesting to see how emotion translates into words.

[Slicka]

for ppl who wanted to hear wht the vocals would sound like