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Can't Give Up

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Ayo
I'm not an asshole in any shape or form but when you take and scorn
me, be ready to brace the sword, I won't quit, until I face the lord
see, when hatreds born it's the like the greatest storm
g, theres no place safe and warm, no escape gates or horn
no trace of norm, we get angry, and express it with rhymes
it gets more than hectic at times, messing with minds
when you're expecting to shine, like X in his prime
then someone comes thru like you dropping an excellent line
and your reflection declines, the greatest rejection you'll find
you'll be off the map if you don't change ur direction in time
cuz in 20/20 all of the old perception is blind
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Post by Glamtrash »

Get rid of the last bit.
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Post by Gutta »

shit waas crazy the flow was really solid, but the ender didnt seem to be as strong as the rest of the piece but it was tight drop bruh
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Post by complexity »

It was to 8 mile beat, btw

And I promise, it will have a rewrite ending and more, now I'm positive, thanks.
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

2 short,and yea ppl already noted the ending line thing,good multis and 4 flowin 2 that beat,it wuz a nice flow,fix it a lil n drop the finished version
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Post by complexity »

Thanks T, you know I'll hit you up later.
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Post by Cee4 »

this was nice. good flow multis blah blah..the usual lol.
kinda seems like i always say the same thing because you always come consistent. i dont know what people are talking sbout your closer tho. i thought it was one of the highlights of the verse



I'm not an asshole in any shape or form but when you take and scorn
me, be ready to brace the sword, I won't quit, until I face the lord
see, when hatreds born it's the like the greatest storm
g, theres no place safe and warm, no escape gates or horn
^^^^^
i liked this section



no trace of norm, we get angry, and express it with rhymes
it gets more than hectic at times, messing with minds
when you're expecting to shine, like X in his prime
then someone comes thru like you dropping an excellent line
^^^^
this was still good but it wasnt at the same level as the rest of the verse
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Post by complexity »

Cee4 wrote:this was nice. good flow multis blah blah..the usual lol.
kinda seems like i always say the same thing because you always come consistent. i dont know what people are talking sbout your closer tho. i thought it was one of the highlights of the verse



I'm not an asshole in any shape or form but when you take and scorn
me, be ready to brace the sword, I won't quit, until I face the lord
see, when hatreds born it's the like the greatest storm
g, theres no place safe and warm, no escape gates or horn
^^^^^
i liked this section



no trace of norm, we get angry, and express it with rhymes
it gets more than hectic at times, messing with minds
when you're expecting to shine, like X in his prime
then someone comes thru like you dropping an excellent line
^^^^
this was still good but it wasnt at the same level as the rest of the verse
I removed a line and changed one. That could had helped. I'll be adding more later. Thanks for the feed.
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