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Back In Da Day (Freestyle/Written)

Post by HKX »

Back in da day it use 2 be bout da essence
I miss da old days like when momz use 2 buy me presents/
4 Christmas; I wished 4 a microphone
I never got one but I freestyled off da dome/
sometimes I wonder and drift off on how dis game would be if Pac and Biggie didn't die
would it be da same as it is or would it be like it was back when i was 5/
I doubt it; in my opinion dis game is all fucked up
commercializin' everythin' they see jus 2 get a fast buck/
I can't blame them tho sort of hard sayin' no 2 cash when u come 4rm nuthin'
u get in dis game 2 make music 4 da people but in da end u lose sumthin'/
ur persona; makes u wanna do wat u gotta do 2 get 2 ur dream
pre-madonna's; slitherin' around like anacondas 2 get da cream/
da old skoo vs da new u could put me in da middle
cuz i'm sort of both when it comes down 2 it dis is not a riddle/
i'm jus statin' who I really be
and dis is a free
im on dat poetry/
dat all of us really miss
i luv dis game but dis game is a bitch
and it will never switch/
back like it was cuz honestly dis world has a lot of talent
da way I look at it keeps dis game balanced/
4rm da whack and da real
I ain't da whack I jus spit wat I feel/
Hip Hop ain't dead its jus infested wit lames
dat can't spit 4 shit I don't think things will change
disgracin' dis game wit whack flows wat ashame
grab a glock and plz blow out ur brains
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Post by MesaR »

dude we can tell that your not a textcee because this was basic as hell dude there was no flare, no " oooh " factor do you know what im saying..

your audio's are dope, but writtens like these just dont cut it
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Post by HKX »

its all good nigga dats y i put freestyle on it cuz shit aint really a written i jus free wrote wat ever popped out 4rm my head i aint really a textcee dats 4 sho but i kno how 2 da all da formats of a textcee jus tried sumthin different dats all good lookin on da feed nigga
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Post by MesaR »

yeah dude no problem just giving you my feed, atleast you dont think im hating like alot of emcees would lol.

if you increased your creativity, multis, punchlines, it would work miracles for your audio game witch is already great, so yeah stay up
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Post by HKX »

no doubt my nigga shit its ur opinion if i spit dis right in front of u u would be like damn dat shit was bananas lol yea wrote it while i was at work but imma write another one within a few mins 4rm now or so lol
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Post by Omega Bill »

If you're gonna keep dropping text, it's going to be a tough transition from always doing audios, to dropping the occasional text.

I personally think Sequence came down too hard on you for this drop. It was not bad. I realize that writing for an audio, is wayyyyyyyy different than writing for text. That's why I can't quite make the transition from text to audio.

The piece, as one of your first TEXT drops on here, isn't too bad.

Structures off, flows a bit choppy, lyrics a bit basic. But nothing that cannot be elevated and elevated quickly being you have experience in rapping. Like you said, if you were to spit this it'd probably be dope. Like I said, nothing a few tweaks cant fix in your texting style.

Kurse will prolly help you cause he can make the transition back and forth. His texts don't touch his audios but the job still gets done.

Stay up man. Keep droppin.
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Post by HKX »

lol its all good I don't really need Kurse's help wit my shit but its all good tho thanks 4 da feed and all I feel u on da audio/textcee transition tho i've been recordin' since I was like 9, I think next time I'll drop a freestyle in da chamber cuz i read it myself b4 I posted it and I was like fuck it shits a free lol
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