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Re: Always A Champion ft. Mutual Hostility

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just at work i read thru it quickly n realli like this shit man dope!
ill be bak on later tonite im new to this website luvin it so far keep these rhymes up bro
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Re: Always A Champion ft. Mutual Hostility

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Thanks For All The Feed
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Re: Always A Champion ft. Mutual Hostility

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I like this a lot. Excellent Multies from both parties. Thought the flow in the intro faltered just a bit, but nothing major. Nice job on the first verse keeping one rhyme going.
I redefined mind over matter with rhymes and patterns that I combined in this final chapter/
this time I stand higher than the flyest rapper by a little giant ladder and I got my style mastered/
That was especially dope.
A Threat In My Mind And The Shadow That Follows Me Doesnt Fit My Description
Fixed In Position, Clipped Stripped Of Ability And Was Given The Sickness Of Wisdom
Sickest line from Mutual, I thought. Good shit throughout.
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Re: Always A Champion ft. Mutual Hostility

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thanks for the feed Kau muc precciated
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Re: Always A Champion ft. Mutual Hostility

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I wish both of my verses would go to another planet and die.
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Re: Always A Champion ft. Mutual Hostility

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erm that is pretty insightful information there Plex how could we have lived without reading that.
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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- Mutual - wrote:erm that is pretty insightful information there Plex how could we have lived without reading that.
You're welcome! lol
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Re: Always A Champion ft. Mutual Hostility

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Both cats murdered this shit, I really wish I could give some more indepth feed but there's too much to quote, the only crit' I can think of is the stretched lines, the multies and content were still dope, although to me it's almost a waste of talent if you can't actually spit it to a beat, although the talent is still present nonetheless, overall ill shit.
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Re: Always A Champion ft. Mutual Hostility

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Phasewon wrote:Both cats murdered this shit, I really wish I could give some more indepth feed but there's too much to quote, the only crit' I can think of is the stretched lines, the multies and content were still dope, although to me it's almost a waste of talent if you can't actually spit it to a beat, although the talent is still present nonetheless, overall ill shit.
Agreed, but its easy enough to shorten lines if they are separated by rhymes :]
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