Re: *THE SLAUGHTER!!*
Posted: Mon May 30, 2011 11:51 am
nice work bro keep doing your thing look forward to your next flow
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Re: *THE SLAUGHTER!!*
Posted: Mon May 30, 2011 1:08 pm
thanks man. and yeah i'll keep at it!
Re: *THE SLAUGHTER!!*
Posted: Tue May 31, 2011 9:15 am
Wooo fire fam! Def worth putting on a beat! Id love to hear it!
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Re: *THE SLAUGHTER!!*
Posted: Thu Jun 02, 2011 7:10 am
thank you man. haha i'll see what i can do
Re: *THE SLAUGHTER!!*
Posted: Fri Jun 03, 2011 7:41 am
I don't know. I feel like you're just tipping the iceberg of where you will go as an artist. Having not seen your previous work, I can't judge the level that you're consistently at. I'd say, this is an above average piece with a few memorable moments, most notable at the top.Arcane wrote:heres a taste of the lyrical collection, the spiritual obsession/
knowledge sugests you invest in physicle protection/
it's a definit aggression, every verse is a explosive confession/
so might i mention venomous rhymes are the corrosive projection/
I wasn't particularly feeling the rhyme scheme. The vocabulary was cool as hell though.
the show is something you should go to see, life is something you should owe to me/
the sick notery was inscribed since i was in my mothers ovaries/
i spit this flow so soberly, keep counting like a religious rosary/
love is what they show to me a rapper representing the paki over seas/
come face the elite, every bar absurd and simply discrete/
i repeat another rappers dead and now my diaries complete/
your flow is starting to deplete, your falling from the heat/
hit the street i guess these phony rappers are finally admitting defeat/
i'll crisp your skin into leather, your as soft as pillow feathers/
so your ricocheting of my fists in the violent and storming weather/
you'll never be as clever, i got a magical mandible so your feeling pressure/
but damn i got you headless just by holding the scepter and spitting this lecture/
Re: *THE SLAUGHTER!!*
Posted: Fri Jun 03, 2011 10:21 am
i thought it was... ok... some of the vocab was forced.... and some of the multies were a bit sloppy.... as for the scheme i actually like it it could just be cleaned up a little is all