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The Diary of a mother fucken serial killer....


I Open my book with my pen in my hand, These morbid thoughts consuming my mind
With all these evil plans I'm stressed out as fuck, So I'll aim, shoot and un-wind/
Plotting an evil plan my next victim lies ahead, Slice them, Drown them, Or a shot to the head?
Orgasm off of hearing them plead cry and beg, Tortue them through misery while I drink the blood they bled/
I trap my lines between bars like my victims, Kill a jew on Saturday night, Then on Sunday a christian
I rub them the wrong way you call it friction, Killing them by numbers is simply my addiction/
Disfiguring bodies like it's a hobby, I pick up an axe and swing with ease
I'll crack open your cranium just to take a peek inside and see what your mind reads/
Im searing flesh with fire like I'm satan, I'll kill off this whole fucken town
One by one ill roast them, Toast them and let there fluids seep into the ground/
A gleeful squeal as you wonder why I only throw out a few boiled bones
Its because I eat the flesh and use the rest to build my twisted ass throne/
Diary I need you to know I'll never stop this twistedness, I kill more then a hired gun
Because after all this, Us serial killers have a job to do that will never EVER be done/
Hired by wives, She wants you dead and its easy to thrill-her
You're my next victim, Its just a normal day in the life of a serial killer/

Good Battle Micz

Uppin for votes

ok ummm

i have to go with micz on this one...

multies - micz
flow - micz
vocab - blitz had some good shit
similies - micz
complexity - i was swayed by blitz's verse

over all micz got this... blitz had some good lines but they seemed to be rushed n i know it was forced but blitz try to work on shortening ur lines to keep it short n sweet also work on multies micz u did a great job no flaws from u i liked both verses but micz got this from what i saw

vote = 20micz lol

I'll admit. This one was a hard one to judge. Both were excellent. Like I read 16 Micz and I was like damn...good story...good structure...that's gonna be hard to beat. And then I read Blitz's shit and I was like, "Hmmm...very good twists."

To me...a serial killer is a murderer who is addicted to the killing. They kill for the thrill...and I feel Blitz followed that line of insanity a little bit better. Micz was killing a room full of people with a pistol. It just seemed like a post-man gone mad again. Nuthin twisted like you would normally hear out of ur by-the-book serial killer. It just seemed like someone who had a bad childhood that took out his last straw of reality on the innocent. Where Blitz on the other hand doesn't stick to using one tool of death and drinks the blood and eats the flesh of her victims on the side of just orgasming off the thrill!!! Now that's twisted. Serial killers never had a sense of reality...so there's no mind for them to lose. They're tortured souls and Blitz painted a very excellent picture of that. I never thought I could read a female write such a twisted tale...but there's a first for everything and I think I just now experienced that.

The Breakdown...

The Structure: 16 Micz
The Creativity: Both
The Complextiy: Blitz
Who followed the topic to the "T": Blitz

Overall vote goes to - Blitz

...though Micz structure and multi's were good...the true definition of a serial killer is never as simple as Micz painted it to be. It's far more demented and Blitz really brought that to the table. Excellent battle...the best in this tounement so far!

1-1

I Am Going to have to agree with Kure COmpletely, Altough 16 micz had a dope Story And Stuck with it, blitz just had more of the serial killer edge to her story, Which is Why i have to vote For Blitz.

The Structure: 16 Micz
The Creativity: Both
The Complextiy: Blitz
Topic Followed Better by: Blitz

Vote Blitz

Good Job both of you!

so its 3-1

This was a pretty dope battle, i read Micz and im like "damn", micz you had a nice story line and followed it all the way thru. you multles, structure, and story were dope jus not graphic/grusom enuff for me for a serial killer.

blitz tight ass verse and drop in your diary. this was what this topic was about. it was morbid and sounded like somethin a serial killer would jot down. you flow was on point, structure was a lil off but you made up for it.

fav line :
I trap my lines between bars like my victims, Kill a jew on Saturday night, Then on Sunday a christian

^^that was jus sick wit it

vote: Blitz

you all do realize its a diary, but thanks for the votes, there were some parts of the story probably went over ur heads..but its all good..

f.y.i, i guess i was writing about a more realistic serial killer, and blitz was doing the movie type...but thanks again for the votes...

1-4 Blitz, uppin

multies - micz
flow - blitz
vocab - blitz
similies - micz
complexity- blitz

A gleeful squeal as you wonder why I only throw out a few boiled bones
Its because I eat the flesh and use the rest to build my twisted ass throne/
^^ sick

vote= blitz

so blitz you're forfeiting?

i'll post up the final round tomorrow, i'll decide a topic that both contestants must write about, no picking and choosing

and for the final round i want intelligent votes, the main aspects are being on topic, and creativity(how you approach writing on the topic)

the contestants will have 'till friday to post an 8 bar verse (16 lines aka a normal length verse in hip hop)

no posting will be allowed by other members until both verses are dropped, all i wanna see is 2 verses and votes unless you're letting your opponent know you aren't going to show

the winner will receive a free custom beat from me 200 rep points, an award in there profile, an article about them on the front page, a 2 week sticky of any thread they made of their choosing, PLUS a first round bye in the next tourney they participate in, the runner-up will get the option to choose who they want to face in the first round of the next tourney they participate in

since its the final round their'll be no KO, the person thats first to get 5 votes is the winner, in addition to listing categorys you must also write a short breakdown of why you think the person you voted for won

the only way a deadline will be extended is if both contestants don't post on time, no showing shouldn't be an issue 5 days is plenty of time to write one verse, and if you know you aren't going to be able to be able to post it on friday have someone that will be around friday to post it for you