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Posted: Fri Jun 29, 2007 8:53 pm
by complexity
I agree with Kurse, about your level of maturity being significantly higher then other members of Illest. (see Big P's latest drop).

"Time To Stop The " Beef " We Have And Use It To " Feed-The-Poor.. "
A Diffrence Between War n Peace, Yet Every One Wants A " Peace of WAR"

Dope..play on words.

I like the concept of this drop.

A few of the bars seemed well thought out, but still the piece wasn't immersed with substance.

A little more research and reality behind the bars would have been preferred.


"Kids Have Been Abused By This, Emitonaly Torn And Wont-Even-Speak..
Ive Been Victimised And It Feels Like My Cold Heart, Dont-Even-Beat"


If you're going to claim you have been victimized by racism, you should elaborate further on it. Not only would it be an intriguing story, but it would have fit perfectly in with this piece.

Most people can't relate to a bar, about white people being discriminated against because of their skin color. Though it does happen. You would need to clarify yourself.

Keep it up though man.

Posted: Fri Jun 29, 2007 9:17 pm
by MesaR
alright.

Thanks Alot Everyone

Posted: Fri Jun 29, 2007 10:42 pm
by T-Stylez
kool keep it up every1 else already said wht i was gonna say

Posted: Sat Jun 30, 2007 12:13 am
by LadySam
Kurse wrote:You know...for someone being at the age in which you are...you speak with alot of emotion and with excellent choice of words. Being 13...14 yrs old, you're definately a bright gentleman. You're definately 1 to shine when it comes to writtens here on illest. You've had some good writtens in the past but I'd say you've entered a new level of mature nature and topic here. Very good. Few more years and ur gonna be at a sick-ass level of writing kid...no question!
i agree keep writing buddy and keep showing them to me =) ur getting better. go the fucking aussies mateeee.
i didnt go to camden thats bloody gayy! haha dont mind me.

Posted: Sat Jun 30, 2007 5:54 pm
by кℓαѕѕιιcк
Hey
Thats The first time one of these White People From sydney
round tha camden Area Wrote sumthing decent
90% the mother fuckers are giving us shit
i LIKE it bro I feel it all tha way
Its a good message
maybe you should put that on audio

Posted: Sat Jun 30, 2007 8:43 pm
by LadySam
come to sydney bankstown ull see good arab-aussie rappers too lmao..yes yes wanabe ones offcourse haha