Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 7:52 am
even b-bear thinks ur shits... well... shitB-Bear wrote:no problem, always appreciate some good feedback..!!
no offence man, but i'm just so fuckin tired of readin verses like yours.. i wanna do this and that, i dream about this and that, look at misrable me and my life.. i want to read somthin else.. that's all.. but since i've first started wrtitin i might as well give u someethin to work on..
structure gotta be more consistent, flow was choppy.. lackin creativity.. sorta heard everything before, understand what i mean.. thinkin outside the box is good.. try concentrating on a topic next time, do some thinkin around that topic, some clever shit.. and put that in your verse.. that's my advice.. then u'd prolly get more feed as well.. that's somethin this site is lackin, people givin feedback!!
