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Yeah fam, you already know... good flow, good use of multies... good job staying on topic...

Props man..

Nice job staying on topic.

A few lines could have been written better, but you got across the point.

"Moms Was Satisfied Without Money As Long As She Had Crack in Tha Pipe
Never Sheltered That's Why When i Turned 16 i Dissapeared in Tha Black Of Tha Night"

That's a crazy bar and if not exaggerated. Sorry to hear.

"i Dont Give A Fuck That Pops Dissapeared i Dropped Rock For A Year
i Witnessed Death At A Young Age That's Why i Never Stop When i Fear "

Overall it was solid. I loved the emotion, keep it up.

Im gonna break the bars down here. It`s not as easy to break down a verse like this as a battle/diss verse but I`ll give it a shot coz you always give me decent feed

A Man Needs Motivation So i'm Not Even Gonna Write For Feed
i'm Gonna Pick Up Tha Pen With Hate And Spite Ya Seeds
I like this bar flowed well, nice concept
As A Youngin i Never Made Honor Roll it's Like i Fight Degrees
Some Say i'm Morbid Others Say He Writes What He Sees
Again nice concept was good. U could of improved the flow if you matched the multis
i Love Green Money And Weed Have Always Been Tha Fuel Ta My Fire
Every Man Wants Ta Be Rich i Know it's Cruel But it's My Desire
Same again the bar was straight but could have been improved if you matched the syllables. that's being quite picky coz it still flows well to me
Picture A Youngin in Tha Projects No Food On Tha Table
Shitty Diapers in Tha Bed i Grew Crude From Tha Cradle
Nice bar/wordplay..etc
Moms Was Satisfied Without Money As Long As She Had Crack in Tha Pipe
Never Sheltered That's Why When i Turned 16 i Dissapeared in Tha Black Of Tha Night
This is some real shit man. I like this. Typical TGYH
i Witnessed Tha Blackest Of Nights Got Jumped Cuz i'd Turn My Back To Tha Fights
i Bring Tha Biggest Truths To Tha Page That's Why i Spit Crack When i Write
This bar is OK. Nothing special but nothing really wrong with it
i Dont Give A Fuck That Pops Dissapeared i Dropped Rock For A Year
i Witnessed Death At A Young Age That's Why i Never Stop When i Fear
Again this is some hard shit, good flow and multis
This is Tha Truth Ya'll Can Take it Or Leave it Hate Or it Love it
Hand Me A Pen And Pad And i'll Teach Ya How Ta Push When i Shove it
Nice closer

Overall I liked this piece. You stayed on topic well. The flow was still good even though the structure could have been improved a bit. Decent multis for the most part. Some real shit. Keep It Up

Man I dunno how I snoozed on these drops so far I like it dawg this 1 I felt more then the 1st it keeps getting dope that diaper like was sick aight on to the next 1