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its cold n da clouds r dark i left a mark back there, statin the world aint safe, i crave grade A steak, cuttin thru meat n flesh leavin u beat to death, i put the whole street to rest like a feat wit meth, most discrete n best, startin at ur brain and leavin ur feet for last, u cant own keeps wen i make u slip so fast, u get hit wit gas left from a bottle of ether, hail mary aint savin ya go get ya self a preacher, smacked to kindergarten n get shanked by ur teacher, wake up in da hospital wit a sweaty T-shirt and realize u been trippin, im infinite so it means i stay spittin, words dat contain cancer leavin ur body dead for a panther, im the answer to takin over da world i make one vial fit to leave ur whole state in a whirl, crackin da head of a squirrel up against ya skull, ur a defensless dog, ima dispense the fog n have the cops come find u shoved in a log, i can cut it real short n leave the whole planet under, n get exiled from the universe from stealin Zeus' thunder

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Well. Some parts were good, some were dope. And some were just strange. It seemed to involve a few to many animals. I completely got lost in the story. And getting shanked by ur teacher? It was alright, but i liked your earlier freestyle better. This is just a little bit weird.

haha, definately got nice lines in there

"cuttin thru meat n flesh leavin u beat to death, i put the whole street to rest "

dope^^^

and: "get exiled from the universe from stealin Zeus' thunder"

great endin^^^

story strays around but the rhymescheme changes pretty smoothly and its creative as hell