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pretty lame song..

Really man, there is so much to live for and so much to die for...
feels like life hates me, but there are things that keep me going
may sound kind of pussy but theres things that keep me going through the day like..

My mother,i wake up and hug'er
my brother,i hate em but still cant replace em
this life that im making, live life without faking
waiting, antisipating, and debating
how much time my dads taking, procrastinating
while you cats are hating im sadly relating
my pops to satan and satans has a higher rating
i live for ball, fall, crawl, and stand tall
and rap for wisdom and for my knowledge to expand all
i planned to grow grand, but im writing with no hand
im writing ya'kno fam, not inviting no fan
the board is a problem my obsession cant solve
its impossible to stop ridin, picture seeing sand dissolve
live life wit temptation, one mic and a station
i try to expand creation, but it takes preperation
build a solid foundation on your crews location
through the good and bad times i go on sayin..

why we live?we live for rap and the kids
why we live?our family laughs,hugs, kisses and the gifts
why we live?material things that catches our eye
why we live?we live cause we dont want to die. Why we live.

we live to inspire all who admire, including you
dreams we aspire,so rhymes wont expire, love excluding dudes
stop polluting, debuting, while im moving quickly
through lyrics im painting masterpieces, your only knitting
we all die but look at the time we're wasting
everyones running away from death but for life we're all racing
theres things im no longer chasing, dreams no longer waiting
im going after things, these kings that im replacing
my possesions, are a weapon, mankind is threatened
cause with 16 micz, i verbally show my agression
spitting verbally is my profession, attacking verbally with my expression
i know you've heard of me,cause i use discretion when i spit verbally
you may think im burnt when i say im hot in the third degree
sometimes i live without praying,take without paying
with all these games that im playing, monsters im slaying
i still live through the good and bad times and go on sayin

why we live?we live for rap and the kids
why we live?our family laughs,hugs, kisses and the gifts
why we live?material things that catches our eye
why we live?we live cause we dont want to die. Why we live.


i just felt like doing a popular topic, this is by far the worst track on the mixtape i may not even add it..

leave feedback ill return the favor.

bump, leave fuckin feedback.

my brother,i hate em but still cant replace em

hehe, i can relate

we all die but look at the time we're wasting
everyones running away from death but for life we're all racing

wow, i like that "racing towards death" its ironic, and an amazing meta, very impressive

I didn't feel the chorus to much, but it was straight, and rains true.

you may think im burnt when i say im hot in the third degree

Some shit was a little unfitting for the piece, trying to be emotional, but saying shit like that, and a few concieted parts in the piece to, which i didn't think fit in this particular instance. though the song was about you, in a lot of wayz, i still don't think lines like this were necessary

my possesions, are a weapon, mankind is threatened
cause with 16 micz, i verbally show my agression
spitting verbally is my profession, attacking verbally with my expression
i know you've heard of me,cause

You still could have talked about the mic being ur fate without gloating, maybe i missed the point of the piece. But

I felt this in general 8/10.

well thx uh i agree with u when u say some parts didnt go with the piece lol i just started wiritng shit from the top as far as the "my possesions, are a weapon, mankind is threatened
cause with 16 micz, i verbally show my agression
spitting verbally is my profession, attacking verbally with my expression
i know you've heard of me,cause " i was trying to tell how i live for mics in a sense, rapping but i guess you sort of precieved it correctly..

liked the topic and story on this, you're getting better at wording your rhymes so it seems more natural, your rhyme schemes improving too

good job.

2nd mixtape track..read em and weep.