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Maybe I can get some feed on this in here. it's poetry but... I'm looking for honest feed. help if you can...


Between my house and the end of the street
Is a journey, four front yards, three fences
And two bus stops away lived Kenneth.
Now Kenneth, he always used to say
“I once watched my mother die on this lawn.â€

poetry is not really my thing but i thought this was pretty good. cant really give u much advice but you definitly had good imagery goin on here