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servin up thoughts like bombs and my nerves-are-shot
words-are-hot aome feel like napam is hittin the earth-in-spots
mental's translucent brain waves travel like they ran-fluent
some men-stupid fake theifs of after ice but this man's-fluid
a straight grand-nucence i grabbed the mic and ran-through-it
blessed wit the gift-of-gab stupendous and you'll witness-that
i spit-a-rap a perfect craft exhale my lungs to give-it-back
dreaming of emense-greatness its unreal and sensesaticious
inside this gents-basement music sends bass that bends-pavement
dont be pretencious my master-plot is crafted in a rappers-thought
just pass-tha-pot and take deep breaths until the laughter-drops
wit mental-telepathy i train my brain to think this pencils-extasy
to my resentful-enemies i'll bend they conseption of stenciled-greed
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Damn thats some hot piece of multies there nice drop.
You got good ideas, but didnt stick to them to complete them.
flow was good sensaticious was forced and didnt really rhyme with nothing.
All in all A good Drop. Respect

thanx

with the word sensatacious you got to say it right like sense-sat-acious
still uppin

it was a good read
i gotta say no beef or anythin
but multies were good jus nothin wowin
but this was quite well written
loved the multies but prolly coulda stepped up
so jus
keep'em comin

flow/multis def on point..so props for that
the storyline was kinda boring though..
didnt really keep my attention locked..
no hate though..