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[align=center]Your perfect vision gives the illusion of better focus/
But you never notice how you abuse whoever's closest/
Eyes watching that dark cloud hoping it rains less/
Once a derailed car, now an emotional train wreck/
It's the same stress that you've avoided with time/
Your poor choices define your own poisonous mind/
The lack of confidence has left you feeling worthless/
And reassurance only seems to heal the surface/
They say to kneel in churches, they say that God can fix it/
The only problem with it is you know He's nonexistent/
They've got it twisted, how you love to play the victim/
Betray their wisdom, always looking for ways to trick 'em/
You hate the system, but you're too weak to fight it/
You keep it private, but in ways you seem to like it/
Feeling frightened, you're only escape is popping pills/
It's not the thrill, just want the pain to vanish like David Copperfield/


You could Say Homies Bold Walking That Lonely Road
Where It's Only Cold To a Man With No Feelings..
No Healing, Applys When Lies Decieve Him...
He Breathe's in Thinking Of a Reason Hes Still Breathin
Its Like a Unconcious decision cause theres no Rill MEANING!..
Betrayed By a Killer Who gets Kicks out Of Corpses...
Victums Piling up Similar To Shit out Of Horses...
Trying to Break Barriers,i Got Picked Out a Fortriss!...
your Perception of Love should be Kept in The Mudd...
Buried Deep, Why couldn't you Keep my RECEPTION ABOVE??
cause you Make 'Poor Choices' Like a fiends Selection of Drugs..
In My Mind I'm No FIT SO..I'm Having a Fit Yo..
Use to Handle Cold Things Well Where'd My MITS GO?..
Now I'm Stuck Arguin Wit Myself Like SKITSO'S!..
This Is a Honest Promise you Won't Ever See Me Revived..
Next Time just Kill Me, Don't Be a Canibal & EAT ME ALIVE....[/align]

i like this...shits deep...good meaning...both of yall wrote it out dope as fuck...mad props..keep droppin

Pretty nice verses.
Exercised the concept pretty well, were able to draw up decent images through word.
Emotional expression was strong.
I think Ruckus came a lil harder when it came to the overall description of emotion. But Haz made up for it in makin his script a lil more complex.

Pretty good stuff.

dude the first verse was fire..
multis, flow were perfect
the concept n creativity was damn good.

the 2nd verse was good too..
i liked that skitzos line..

yall both came hard on this, and it was well worth reading

Props

It turned out really good guys. Ruckus started it off really strong and Haz, you played off it real good.

Good shit guys.

Yow Haz i really liked bothe verses bro, both of you came through it was a nice collab, Smooth flow on point with no forced rhymes and just a well prepared piece. I liked the first verse more caz it was well prepared and the rhyme scheme was on point. The emotional lines caught my attention as well as the multies because they were clear as crystal. Lot of original creativity in the verse too. If you both got a chance like i did check out my scriptures.
Keep droppin brothas.

this was dope
Ruckus had a straight flow
dope verse with some feeling
and did the topic well

The lack of confidence has left you feeling worthless/
And reassurance only seems to heal the surface/
They say to kneel in churches, they say that God can fix it/
The only problem with it is you know He's nonexistent/

that was dope yo^

an Haz has a bit more complexity in there
had some thought put into the lines
both verses came out dope a good read
and executed this topic really well dope shit


your Perception of Love should be Kept in The Mudd...
Buried Deep, Why couldn't you Keep my RECEPTION ABOVE??
cause you Make 'Poor Choices' Like a fiends Selection of Drugs..
In My Mind I'm No FIT SO..I'm Having a Fit Yo..
Use to Handle Cold Things Well Where'd My MITS GO?..
Now I'm Stuck Arguin Wit Myself Like SKITSO'S!..

that was fire Haz^

okay so dope shit
keep'em comin

Thanks for the feed peeps.

haha that shyt is dope mayne...on the real..
I liked both verses.. and the concept is sick..


It's the same stress that you've avoided with time/
Your poor choices define your own poisonous mind/
The lack of confidence has left you feeling worthless/
And reassurance only seems to heal the surface/


^^^^that was my favorite part out of ruckus' verse..everybody likes the
sims and meta's but I like the (Tru) or straight talk this gave me
specifics without having to envision a different scenario
straight up felt th message.

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your Perception of Love should be Kept in The Mudd...
Buried Deep, Why couldn't you Keep my RECEPTION ABOVE??
cause you Make 'Poor Choices' Like a fiends Selection of Drugs..


^^^^this is my fave part of Haz's shyt for the same reason...straight up ^^
crazy ill concepts to as descriptive sims and meta's
dope shit guys..

I really liked this. First verse was really dope. Didn't know Ruckus was that good.
And Haz as usual brought fire.
There's alot of emotion and a good message and really deep. Just shows off the versatility of these 2 writers.
I mean it wasn't mind bogglingly good but it was still dope.
8/10

Nice

Both came hard on this one here

Right fromt he first 2 bars i was Hooked and wanted to read it all

u both spit some fire




Will check ya next posts 4 sure

nice.. nice idea and execution..

in certain places it was a little simple

first verse was solid, and the god bit was bananas

second bit was a bit more clever wit plays

cool shit ya'll...