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No Matter Dat Place I'm Filled Disgrace How Real Can Stay
With All These Faggot Muthafuckas Playing Fake In My Face
I'm Feeling Da Feelings Of Killing with No Healing
Change Da Roof off Ceiling So That my Flow is Revealing
Change Da Pace Of All This Hating Lyrical Emancipation
My Heart is Racing I Can't Hate On All Ya'll Placement
But This Music Is My Patient Inside My Doctor's Motivation
Hip-Hop Needs Help Now Save It
Ain't No Need In Trying To Blame Dude
Be Respectful Hip-Hop I Saved You

It was alright. Some of the rhymes were off and you could have used more multies to make it flow better. I don't think you're gonna be saving hip-hop with a verse like this, but it shows potential.

You got to say it kind of fast den slow it down at the end

shit i automatically did that

jus my type'a flow i guess
a good read a bit short
coulda been improved by length
multies n shit
but pretty good
keep'em comin