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an addict-of-rap magic as rabbits-in-hats
the habbits-u-act got you mad an just trapt
a screaming beast out side i am an animal
try and grasp the fact but i am just not tangible
my mandible allows sounds to combine n land-a-blow
a sample so you dont have-2-know leave it be a mystery
not even scooby doo could capture me i'll leave my mark on history
like i stole the deed to what your children read
and convinced um of my chivilry
my tendicies is to let your imagination lead-the-way
this evil demon's-plague will have you believe-in-faith
got fans like mice and what im spittin is cheese-suflae'
you need-2-pay more attention to what i say
cause everyday could be your last chance seize-tha-day
no redemption that conseption has drifted-past
like a last chance intervention if you high your did-ya-last
i shift-it-fast than kick-ur-ass when my 6's-blast

Nice multies but you didnt stay on point and were'nt consistent with your bars you ideas were all over the place and the whole verse seem like a run on rap with no certain topic.
The flow was a bit confusing in some of the end of each bars because you quickly switched to another rhyming word, but maybe thats your style. I definately enjoyed the read it was worth my time and feed. Keep dropping homie i hope you practice more to perfect your skills.

If you got a chance peep my scriptures, believe me you will not be dissapointed.

yeah i agree^
the multies were a lil bit scattered
the flow wasnt consistent but it was still dope
shit some really dope vocab in there executed well
but u seemed to stray off point from what u started with
but it was a good read atleast better than ya last drop
keep'em comin