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First track in awhile, couldn't think of a hook so i said fuck it and searched my notepad for old shit, feed would be appreciated...


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"No matter what I say, those tears run down your face.
And no matter what I tell you, I'm going away.

I asked her what life is, but she had no reply, so I asked her what love is, and she said you and I.
Though I know I, can't find love, she told me she was mine, but time, goes by and so do I, I smiled and said goodbye, But why?
Those eyes which cried for me, that broke down on the sight of me, leaving I could even feel and hear her heart beating, screaming.
Yelling for me to stay, begging me not to go, but this life I lead, aint right for me, there's things I gotta know.
So I gotta go (gotta go) it's best if we part here, I will take away your tears, and I'll leave my heart here, fear.
No loss, if we were really meant to be, trust me one day or another life will bring you back to me.
Back to me, exactly, how we were before, I remembered she was mine, so I told her I was yours.
Though I was sure, that we would never meet again, so I said goodbye, bye I watched her as she cried.

No matter what I say, those tears run down your face.
And no matter what I tell you, I'm going away.
And no matter how I hurt you, I just want to say.
That I'm sorry, but I just gotta go now, but I just gotta go now.

I look in the mirror and see myself, trying to get away just to free myself, wrongs right justice be my hell, gotta go to sleep dream just to be myself.
Well, eye to eye with the person I hate the most, life's a bi*** tell me to just make the most, of it, but f*** it, jump ship like it's safe to float, either pull away the chair or take the rope.
Fates a joke, Mr. Late Great Hope, disappeared now I'm hopeless, aint that low, well aint that me, and aint that the dream, that I see when I sleep, as my heart beats, hardly.
Sorry mama, I'mma have to leave, cuz the drama in my life's like after me, like half of me is after cheese, while the other is hooked on catastrophe.
Pastor's words turn into a bastard's plea, a slave to depression like master please, I paint pictures like master pieces, talk to Jesus no idea who he is.
I am, why am, I so lonely, months since I've spoken to my homies, bury myself inside my mind no one can control me; life is but a dream if only.

No matter what I say, those tears run down your face.
And no matter what I tell you, I'm going away.
And no matter how I hurt you, I just want to say.
That I'm sorry, but I just gotta go now, but I just gotta go now."

good topic...like how u put it together..ur flow fit the beat..imo tho i woulda done it differently...but thats for u to decide how u do it..lol...mixin coulda been done better....i always notice that it sounds like ur whispering on the track...is that just how u record?...or r u trying not to be loud?...lol...jst a ?...but otherwise it was pretty good...one of the best uve dropped..topic/story wise and wat not...keep doin u man

beat is sick i can't fuck wit beats dat have tags on em but fuck it right, yea Viral got a point dawg never noticed it but u do whisper on ur shit and u always sound da same a lil here and there but da track was nice da hook i wasn't feelin dat much it was aight but shit sort of killed da track dawg, next track u drop show sum emotion dawg cuz dats wat ur missin u sound like ur bored as fuck dawg jus sum advise keep droppin

A typical KG track.
Nuthin wrong wit that though.
You did your slow-flow thang on the first verse, which wasn't bad...it fit the beat. Lyrically this song was very poetic which I found to be an interesting change of pace.
Second verse was written better, and more confidently than the first verse, but i noticed you tried to speed up the flow a lil bit which led you to fall off bit a little bit a few times.
Hook...words were straight. Hated the chipmunk vocals though...that kinda ruined it for me. This actually would've been the perfect track to use the AutoTune for and add a lil T-Pain effect on the hook.
Not bad. Decent mixtape material if you're puttin one together.